All Comments on 'Nurse Me Home'

Here's an interesting dichotomy- your syntax/ grammar are excellent and most of your dialogue is somewhat natural-sounding, but wow: the story just left me flat and the denouement was a major "WGAF?" moment.<br><br>

You may want to consider collaborations. You're an editor in need of a storyteller. Have someone bring the porn, and you turn it into an enjoyable read. <b>You can do it!</b>