All Comments on 'Obsession - Sister'

A few spelling mistakes but they didn't detract from a good tale.

Agreed, a good story. Aforementioned spelling issues made perfect sense when coupled with the occasional awkward turn of phrase. English gets easier if you understand where a word comes from - Anglo-Saxon, Latin, French, German, Scandenavian: actually, the further north you go the more Scandenavian the language gets. Ironically a Norwegian better understands Geordie (Newcastle) than an English person. I mention this because words ending in -ve can be vexing to school children and foreigners. So singular f becomes pleural -ves as in shelf, roof becoming shelves, rooves, though this is dying out in America and failing to make it to spell checkers. The derived verb is not illogical, 'I am going to shelve your book, and roof your house.' verbs ending in -ve should become -ven but they are being replaced by the generic -ed. Shelven your book and shaven my face have become shelved and shaved though shrive is still shriven. English is fun n'est ce pas. but easier when you think of linguistic origins. It's relationship to German is strong, you just have to think obliquely. Also, the vocabulary you use defines your class and education.

Have fun and write more.

Yes, it is a translation from my own work I used to publish (also here) in German. And yes, even though I have a degree in English (CAE advanced), I still had to struggle with some idioms and also expressions that didn't really correspond well into the other language. Obviously Google Translate and Merriam Webster were my places to go in times of uncertainty.

I'm glad that it still seems understandable and maybe even enjoyable for you. Thanks for your feedback!

This was a very good story of what some young boys go through when around an older beautiful sister, not all get to fuck her though, just some are lucky enough to.

I enjoyed your story very much, very down to earth and so made it more real.

Well done - gut gemacht

Congratulations - Herzliche Glückwünsche

5* 😀😀

This story at first was hard to fathom but later it became clear that his sister was as interested as he was in exploring a forbidden area among siblings as sex is. I hope you'll write more and that his sister will teach him to be a better lover and last longer. That she will want sex with him more and more and that both of them will grow closer and stronger. Thank you.

Couldn’t get past the lack of command of the English language

Sorry

I actually enjoyed the mistranslations, here and there. I really enjoyed the story and the interaction between the two siblings. However, the culmination of the story was too abrupt for me. I would have rather seen Jan work through his feelings of jealousy and rejection before she suddenly gives in to him, seemingly out of mere sexual frustration, which cheapens it somewhat. I love what you wrote, though, about not needing to see the rest of the world if you already feel fulfilled with the one you share this part with. It is obvious that there is a difference in their feelings for one another, but that little insight might have led the way for her to appreciate him later, after she realizes that the rest of the world can never love her like he will. I would really love to see where they end up.

I could definitely see a sister and brother being intimate when possible over a lifetime. Whether their eventual spouses could deal with it is very unlikely.

There is a fascinating story on this site named Katy's Smell that goes back to 2015. Unfortunately after six chapters the author left the end unfinished and the readers hanging. Amazingly a Google search on the two-word title brings up the story.

If you choose to extend your storyline, please don't wait years to do it!

This was a really good story, and I didn't mind the occasional grammatical error.

Beautiful! I personally think that a reciprocal love between a sister and a brother is something not only beautiful but also very hot and sincere, to feel.Only sisters and brothers who have really experienced such relation,can feel how much powerful feeling it was.

This is such a beautiful story!