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Every literary work that contains some type of hero figure brings that character through several stages of life. We see the character struggle, we see the character becomes stronger, we see the character fail, and lastly we see the character overcome whatever challenges are placed before him. One of the things that I will ask you from the readers to keep in mind when the next part of the story is completed is that this character must undergo changes. Dead is the little boy that became a troubled young man. Dead is a troubled young man that became a fragmented adult. Now what we will see in this character is his true nature: Daemon.
Much love,
aka_Mike
- COMMENTS
IrishLaddy594 months agoA magnificent novel you have written. You have such skill. Your character development was impressive. Each section and chapter was brilliant. All I can do is thank you from the bottom of my heart for bringing these people to life. If D was a Klingon he would find himself in Sto'Vo'Kor. He died well. His time was a good day to die and he found his place with the honored dead.
All the best,
Dave
Darkshooter2136 months agoThough I don't am late to the party, (story at the time of its writing) I have enjoyed it so far. The1st parts of a young man entering the military and to suffer such heartbreak as with a cheating spouse is a an unfortunate hallmark of the life as a service member. Your story pulls back the curtain and exposes a very traumatic phase in a young person's life with the backdrop of war and combat that its dark interlude plays as the the backdrop on our darker side of our humanity. It is a not-so-much secret that many our service members depression and PTSD is derived by events such as this. To say that your story hits home would be an understatement. I hope you you keep writing because (fuck what those haters post in the comments) I have enjoyed reading this and I mm excited to see where this journey will lead to.
drycreeksalmost 2 years agoAWESOME Story really sad to see it end. Good luck in ur future endeavors.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoYou got the Id 10 t down, we all got problems and I cannot write so I'll trust you and try your read and try to understand my problems lol. I hope your style is simplistic .. LIKE; Louis L'Amour and comic books, LOL. Never liked reading but a 125 credits and a Associate Degree in Science and I don't feel any smarter, can't fix anything, got maybe some brain damage. Que Sera, Sera. I've never seen an introduction to all your stories in some kind of a box and so I am intrigue.
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Anonymousabout 6 years agoI read all the stories mentioned. Personally, I thought they vacillated between being vague and ambiguous to chaotic and frenetic. There were a few interesting parts but most of it was lost on me. If it was supposed to be some type of post-war narrative, trust me: James Jones, you ain’t.
