All Comments on 'Office Submission Ch. 01'

The dream of every guy who's masturbated dreaming of a woman.

Loved this.

It got me so hot and hard. Was desperate to cum throughout!

Thanks. Looking forward to more!

Well written. Well paced. Erotic. Great buildup.

Gave it five stars.

Now, on to rest of the chapters. Hope they're as good.

Nice premise.

But you need an editor. You need to learn the diggerence between YOU'RE (which you meant) and YOUR (which you wrote). And the difference between DRAWER (which you eant) and DRAW (which you wrote).

Sex it too matter-of-fact.

Could have been a lot better.

Four stars.

RE: previous comment.

You need to tell apart the words diggerence (jibberish) and difference (something that is not the same). 😂 Also, your use of a full-stop and new sentence is wrong, and I have no idea what the word eant is 'meant' to be! 😉. You need to get yourself an editor to read through your negative comments before posting.

Honestly, just enjoy the story and don't be too quick to criticise.

Maybe try reading some of the other stories pal.

I thought it was great. Very erotic and teasing. Perfect to cum to. Well done.