All Comments on 'Omega Pride Ch. 07'

Thank goodness she is finally accepting him . I really felt for the poor omegas that Delphi was living with because I would have truly wanted to shake her .Wake up Delphi realize that Wyatt is such a good thing. Thank you so much for continuing this original story. I love it so much. Thankyou, thankyou, thankyou...

excellent chapter looking forward to the next one

glad to know you are still not giving up on this story sweetie....i dunno bout the typos, since its almost none -i think- but if you need a beta reader or just a pair of eyes to check, do let me know, it will be an honour.

The lenght is perfect.

well worth the wait.

thank you.

Loved this chapter please make more chapters like this long!!>.<

It was well worth the wait.

!!!

i was waiting forever it seemed like for your next part in this series

Loved this chapter.

Very good.

5 pages! I have been waiting /shedstearsofjoy

I shall go and read now ^-^

then comment again afterwards /lol

Wah, she finally accepted Wyatt as her mate /happy

Interesting characters and plot ^-^ I like the new ones you added in this chapter - e.g. James.

This chapter is definitely worth the wait. I hope you could find an editor soon ^-^

This was worth the wait! Thank you so much.

It's great that she finally accepted her mate, but it puts her in a strange situation. She is mated to the alpha but she isn't strong enough to be the alpha female. That is bound to cause some conflict within the pack.

I honestly wasn't expecting so many of you guys to volunteer! I do believe I found someone, and I thank you all for wanting to do so for me!

--C.C

i disagree with you about shorter chapters, this was the perfect length for your story! i love what you're doing with this story, i'm glad you had kamilia "talk" some reason into her, it was what she needed to hear, and now they are together! and i'm so glad you showed wyatt's patient side, that endeared him to me so much, so now that they have finally gotten together, i'm so happy for him! i can't wait for your next installment!

I really love your style of writing and the way you keep hinting about there being more than what meets the eye, can't wait to see more , Love to see her finally stop submitting and kick some butt!

Read your series last year, and found it quite interesting. This installment though, it lacks punch. It lacks interest. The lead characters actions are, to say the least, boring and uninteresting. As a writer, you really should have culled about 3/4 of this chapter, if not all of it. It just doesn't move quick enough, and doesn't hold the attention of your audience....(Unless you count the crazy fanbois and fangils!) You should do better, and learn from the mistake. Always, no matter what, keep a plot moving in a positive and direct manner. If you want to focus on the personal relationship between the main characters, then do so....But make it interesting. This section of the released chapter grinds down the work.

All in all, I love the work you do.... But this time, I really think you could do better, and deep down, I think you know that too. It's sub-par work, from a good author, and not to be too negative about my comments, but I think you should learn to self edit chapters before submitting them to an editor, learn to read aloud, and learn to look at your plot.

I'm glad Delphi has come to her senses and accepted Wyatt. Now to find out what rank she truly is and why she can't remember parts of her past.

I like it better with the English translation of the French phrases in brackets. It would be even better if you could just use the word for the creepy guy... miyas? Migas? Instead of those symbols. I can't for the life of me remember what it is meant to be and I didn't want to go back to the beginning of the chapter to find out. Just type it normally and we will remember it.

That said, keep up the good work. Continue to work on your editing and I hope to see your work posted regularly!

Sooooo glad you are back!!! Can't wait for the next chapter!

Need to work on the proof reading. There was a good amount of missing words, misspelled words and odd sentence structure.

I really missed this story! Welcome back!

Nicole

absolutely smashing chapter! Loved the sex... cannot wait to read the next...

Hot dang!!!! the chapter was sooooooo........ intense!! Dang U did a great job!! Cannot wait for the next chapter!!

and i have a feeling that when she finally figures out that she is more than she is, the others, including Wyatt better hold on, its going to be a bumpy ride

That was soooo excellent! Thank you for updating.

I'm sorry, but after reading up to this point, I think Delphi is the most annoying character I have EVER read before, the stuttering is driving me insane, her stubbornness also, it's not weakness, but her being stubborn and wanting things her way to the point of hurting her wolf by denying their mate, who she had already mated with! So she finally accepted her mate, now what will she do to ruin it again?

You really need an editor and all the French? I skipped through most as I don't know French and you only gave explanations at the end of a chapter, they are needed at the start not after a reader has gotten to the end.

I normally stay quiet as others have different opinions to the story, and I respect that, but I feel I must say this, Anon.

I now have an editor, and I am rectifying my problems with that issue. The French is staying, and I'm not putting it in the same spots like I use to, rather right after the sentence not at the end of the chapter. As for the verbal tics, well, that's how I write; I write how people would talk not how people write. As for Delphi, I'm sorry you feel that way, and to each their own. But I do thank you for taking the time to read it.

C.C

I do enjoy this story. She's been told for years she's something she's not and is coming to terms with being more then anyone including herself expected. Most women go though this phase at some time or another. I like the French and am gad you're keeping it, love that translations are after the words now, however the word used for the creepy guy/group is hard to read and remember how it's pronounced when reading, it jarrs the flow. Still use it but please write it how it sounds or use the name meaning so it's easier to read.

I think the word 'pants' was overused a bit in the last section (maybe use 'trousers' or 'slacks' or whatever when the breath description is in the same passage) and some sentences aren't phrased properly. The words like -this- are annoying, it makes the characters seem like they second guess their actions, or like an editor put that word in as a substitution suggestion. I look forward to the update with the editing, and would offer to edit as well but I think I may change the story too much as I have no prior experience.

Thankyou and I look forward to the next installment!

Love it don't listen to what the bad anon ppl have to say she is so cool but I feel that the alpha has got more trouble then he can handle looking forward to the next. Chapter thank you

Great chapter! Keep them coming!

I like your story and am waiting for the next installment. The only thing I have a problem is with how everyone treats Delphi, the Delaney group says their not cruel but most of their actions say they are. The female members treat her like garbage for no reason other than having different beliefs than her.(them believing in more than one deity while delphi believes in only one) The Alpha Female ( I know she hates Delphi, idk why tho) needs to cool her act a bit, or needs a major ass whooping that would put her in her place!!!! Last member is the Alpha himself, in the last part he acted more of a control freak than a mate. Just wanted to put my opinion out there.

Well worth the wait :) keep it up!

Loveable characters and emotionally compelling writing. What's not to love? :)

I love this story - keep it up!

Eagerly awaiting the next chp!!!

You need to edit a lot better. Some of the phrasing is wrong and distracting - not quite making sense.

hi enjoyed the story so far but its getting frustating waiting so long for the next chapter. R U punishing us for something... Just - just like in in ur story??? What did we do?

Well, you made us wait forever, but this chapter was worth it. And even though I didn't really like Kamilla before, I'm glad she smacked some sense into Delphi. She was really pissing me off. I'm really happy that you're continuing this story. My one criticism is just that an extra proofread would really help. A lot of grammatical errors are caught because a sentence or phrase doesn't sound right, so try reading out loud to yourself. Although the "innards of her thighs" made me laugh, I'm pretty sure you meant inner thighs...just a thought. Welcome back!

Please keep the French in. For me, it is much more fun trying to work out what she is saying and also helps me brush up on my French (I speak a little). Adding the translation is better at the end because it does not destroy the Quebec flavour to the story. I am intrigued by the X-files twist to your plot. May I suggest that you try and publish this?

I was starting to get pissed with Delphi for her crap, so I'm glad that she's starting to face it cuz I was seconds from finding a new story. Lol...great writing and keep it up :)

I so long your long ones. Keep them cumming.... I so love this story.

She stammers a lot