All Comments on 'On Another World Ch. 05'

You sir are Evil. LOL thanks for the update looking forward to the next one. thank you Mechmanas.

Not bad. Could do with quite a bit more editing, though.

Best Science Fiction on Lit. There are some very talented writers in the genre here.. But you out do yourself time and again. Thanks you for the effort. Looking forward to the rest of this story.

nice work, left me wanting more, as all good stories do,.. a few spelling errors were a minor distraction, similar to seeing a beautiful woman with dirt on her knee.

Look forward to the next chapter,.

Thank you for keeping writing I thought you had given up after chapter 4 but it is good to know you will finish the job. Excellent story!

Love the story keep it moving!!

...but I was surpised to read that you even HAD a proofreader, there are so many problems in this, and all previous chapters in the story! Just a minute, I'm going to go back to page 1 of this chapter and take some notes. Be back in a few!

I sent my follow-up to DS via Feedback.