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AnonymousAnonymousabout 8 years ago
on the beach

Not a bad tale, a bit long, maybe to much Lingo? Maybe a little to much cussing??,

but NOT A BAD TALE!!!

TurbidusTurbidusabout 8 years agoAuthor
thank you

At some point, in the distance future, I hope to re-visit the story. When I do I will re-read it with your suggestions in mind.

Thanks

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

It gets really annoying trying to figure out who is the narrator. Stick with one POV. A truly annoying story.

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Life got awfully busy for a time. I hope to add a few stories again.

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