by Onedragon
As this continues it gets better
Not sure what you have planned, but I hope it goes for a while
Maybe a little long . Need some more variety.
How about her sister?
Keep it short. Maybe 3 to 4 pages. But 5+ pages is too long. And keep them hanging onto each other for a while. Let there relationship grow a bit before it changes there lifestyle completely.
One thing you've done very good is to keep the story at a slow pace before a drastic change. When his aunt and mom was mocking him on the loveseat and it took 4 stories to cover, then all of a sudden they became lovers.
5 star from me...
'irregardless' is a fake word made up by people trying to sound more intelligent than they really are
other than that it was hot hot hot!!!!!!
Find 6 pages is needed to just start the story, provided something actually happens in those pages. One page or 100 pages, if nothing happens it is boring. Luckily this story gets things going. Suggest dad finds his sister in law, and everyone can be happy.
Doesn't seem as though 5stars is a high enough score for this chapter!
would risk having sex with her son while her husband and small children are out? Small children are notorious for getting sick while at a location such as the zoo. They could arrive home at any minute, catching mother and son in action. The only location that such a liaison would be reasonable is at the home of the aunt.
I just completed the first eignt sections. Terrific story. Great plot & characters. I hope the story line continues. Thank you for your work.