All Comments on 'On the Road to Somewhere'

This was by far the best dam brother/sister story I have ever read!!!! Being able to tell such an erotic story without all of the nasty porn movie language was very refreshing! I love reading something that is totally believable, and this story certainly was! The slow build up was perfect, and very well told. This blossomed into a love story, and not just a story about a brother and sister fucking in a totally unbelievable storyline full of vulgarity and fast paced bullshit! Excellent read for sure, and my favorite by far!

OMG that was gorgeous - it was so sweet how you managed to develop the relationship not just the sex - it made the sex and the taboo of it even hotter. Also it didn't leave with a 'neat' 'happy ever after' ending

And ..... Anonymous' comment below - I only had anal for ages as I wanted to keep my virginity (well virgina virginity until I married

Just a delightful read. I loved the progression of their mutual feelings as the story continued on, interlaced with their realization of " where do we go from here ." Many thanks for a well thought out piece !

This was amazing and beautiful. Thank you.

Anal first? Seriously?

One of my favorites Xarth! This is a great story. Plotline and seemingly normal reactions. Thanks.

Lovely story!!! Really a great love story wanted to go on forever!!!

John

really loved how proud and truthful they were with each other, which developed the genuineness of their love and getting them to a place they thought they would never arrive.

I think the author could’ve gotten the kissing part much sooner into the story which would have elevated their play towards intercourse, and included at least one or two episodes of 69 as genuine evidence of their bond to each of before either anal or straight intercourse

Fantastic story. Excellent writing and I love the way the author developed the fact that they are both adults both consensual, and this is both their decision..

congratulations on a very fine accomplishment.

Five Star story...and left "the rest of the story" hanging, as some of the other readers have observed....

Yet, still, I am satisfied when I finish reading your tales...the love and emotional attachment/bonds that are formed by your characters are deep and rooted in place.

Still, would like a sequel cor at least one of your tales...a follow-up of sorts, just to let us know the (fantasy) couple(s) have moved on, hopefully in a good way!!

Another incomplete story from Xarth. Shocking !

One of your finest. Great writing and well developed characters.

OMG. Such a romantic love story. The ending made me smile.

(1/7/2022) Ha...I knew it. I knew he'd be here and leave his standard anal/gay comment. He just can't help himself and It's so freaking funny. I couldn't stop laughing. This was another wonderful tender romantic story; very well written and definitely an enjoyable read. Five stars again. Thank you for submitting this story.

Perfect ❣️

Romantic 😍

Sexy 💥

Very hot 🔥

I cannot make a comment that would truly do this story justice..I'm just gonna say....DAMN GOOD STORY, makes me wish it was a real true event and that it was a real memory of MY life.

The tenderness of a good love story is always more satisfying to me than the sex scenes. Honestly, the brother and sister still have to copulate to make the story satisfying, but I'd be happy if the sex scenes were less descriptive. Don't change what you're currently doing, I'm just saying that if you wrote one with less focus on the prurient interest crowd, my feelings wouldn't be hurt at all.

I love your work Xarth. Very nice.

another great story. while i wish some would continue, i know this way the reader can make up their own endings. while in real life things dont always have happy endings, we can at least pretend they do.

Please continue this story. At least to a few days after they get home. Too good to stop here.

Whit the talk of anal I knew this would be another gay story.

One of my faves in this category. Loving. Romantic and very realistic. Great job I smiled a few times reading it.

Another well written story. Good plot and character development. There were a couple of editing errors; wrong word, wrong tense, etc., but nothing that distracted from the story. I am looking forward to encountering another of your stories as I make my way through the index.

This wasfarbetter than your other two page stories

I'll be moving across country next year and moviing into my sister's home. Each time I visit, I get signals that she is interested in more than just being roommates. From the prolonged hugs to the risque comments, and the talk of going on cruises together, there is sexual tension in the air. Now she says she will come out and help me drive from Arizona to Florida which will take several days. We are not young people, but seniors that still have raging hormones in spite of our ages. I'm widowed and she is divorced, so there is no one to stop a nice relationship from forming. I'm hoping wwe can be like Kylie and Jason and have a real love develop on the way!!

This was a really good one - probably top 3 of the brother - sister genre I've read on here. Thanks for writing it!

Really enjoyed the way that love developed between Jason and Kylie it was nice and slow as they embarked on a voyage of discovery, not only the sexual discovery of each other but also the emotional discovery finding that they were in love with each other and wanted nothing more than to be together.

A true sibling love story

There are spelling and grammar mistakes. However the story was as good as any I have read here and better than most. I loved the ending and really felt like giving it a 5 so there you go.

Loving the stories really draw me in thank you keep it up lol

Your write some of the sexiest and hottest brother sister stories that I have ever read.

Beautifully written, wish your stories went much longer. they would make great full sized novels some of them.

And complete

Excellent story just went to know if there is a CHAPTER 2

Wonderful stories, need more

great story loved it

Great reading. All of your stories intrigue me I cannot stop reading them even when I need to get some sleep before shift. Please do not stop. Keep up the good work and thanks again.

... I know exactly what you mean, getting entirely immersed in the story. Same here.

This one drew me in the most of Xarth's stories I've read so far, and even though they are just characters in a story, I find myself wishing them the best.

Well developed, and well written.

5 Stars.

I am in the process of reading through your list of stories and I must say I enjoyed this one immensely, I like how you took your time and developed the characters, their feelings and emotions, there is a feeling of emersion to your longer stories like this that is truly astounding and is something that I rarely feel when reading on this site, it's not often I find myself holding my breath in anticipation of what is going to happen next or being completely oblivious to anything going on around me because I am too emersed in what I am reading but that is what occurred with this story. Thank you for a fantastic read, you are an amazing author.

Did you not read the story? Mid life crisis and all that? Start reading and comprehending what is going on. Either that or stop commenting. Xarth is a fine teller of tales. But there are always people like you that will find fault.

TBC

For such a naughty but sweet story that has a sustained electric charge throughout, I feel that the line "'So are we gonna be, like, together now?' Kylie asked me." is the most satisfying, as it concretely acknowledges that they both want their new change in their relationship to be long term. But even though both of them want to commit to each other, they probably need to transfer universities to be together if they are currently attending different ones.

Definitely five stars.

He's a moron who speed-reads through a story then jumps on irrelevancies because he hasn't actually taken anything in - let's just say there are gnats with longer attention spans. This story is in a class of its own, from the acknowledged master, long may you reign.

This is an amazing story from start to finish. Hot, hot, hot!!

However, I am gobsmacked that someone could read something like this, (having come to a site like this, presumably to read stories like this), and focus on such an irrelevant detail as why the characters took two cars when one would do.

Keep up the brilliant work.

Did you not read the part that basically said they convinced their dad to take the two seater so he n his sister didnt have to put up with his b.s.?..... pay attention to the story so when you complain you dont sound dumb.

Option B

And the 2nd car was big enough for all 4 of them.

That I really liked. Slow build up, but powerful ending. And just as importantly, it had a proper ending, we're not just left wondering how it turned out.

Well worth more that 5 stars !

Another chapter covering the rest of the holiday and when they got home would be a very welcome bonus, if you should feel up to it !

Some mention of birth control would prevent me from thinking I am watching the beginning of a train wreck.

The perfect balance between heartwarming emotions and hot sex is what makes this story one of the best i've ever read.

I intrigued by your ability to pack so much feeling into such short stories. With few exceptions, you manage to set emotionally-charged scenes and resolve them in a couple pf pages, with characters we can care about. Like others, I would like to see some of these stories continued. But really, yours is a unique talent.

Would love to find out how mom/parents react when they find out, accidentally...

Excellent writer!!

Very special talent you have for bringing out the true feelings of your subjects!

Keep writing!!

I have been on this site for about the last month, and all the stories all these guys seem to be extremely blessed in the genetal area, which for me is off-putting and then the sister has these DDD breasts, I loved the fact that you didn't go into those details leaving the reader some imagining to do. The build-up was exceptional, not just "oh you are naked let me fuck you" but I loved getting to know the characters and real fears and doubts. Definitely my favorite story I have come across.

can i just say that i have spent the past 12 hours reading everything you have posted. you are an amazing writer and have a very good imagination. there is so many stories out there now about incest that are just sex, sex, sex, sex, sex. but you include actual emotions and sentiment into your work and i really appreciate that. if you ever thought of publishing your stories into an adult novel, or expanding onto them with a sequel then i would be behind you 100% and i look forward to reading more of your stories in the future!

As much as I liked the story, Kyle is a loser whiney pussy-assed bitch, sheesh. They should outlaw the character type in stories!

this is really one of my favorite stories by far! really amazing!!!

I've commented on your works before, and I must again. Xarth has fantastic skills and abilities to tell a simple story in a way that feels like you (the reader) are an observer to the action, not reading someone's account. His pacing is also quite magnificent.

This particular story felt like a slow descent into Hell (or ascent to Heaven, depending on perspective) with the inevitable being obvious, but the path being enticing, addicting and irresistible.

I'm impressed with this story because you made Jason and Kylie so much like living beings with thoughts and emotions - particularly Kylie, her personality as seen through her brother's eyes. Dialogue dominated the flow, making it feel fun and engaging. You also addressed some pretty heavy themes in incestuous relationships, without detracting from the story itself.

While I'd be interested to see where they go from here, you left it perfectly, just after their final union, so caught up in their new romance to be all but oblivious to reality.

Great job, one of my favorites. This story is similar to "Sara's Car Trip" by youbadboy, but yours seems more rounded and real.

Fags with no concept of English as a language or of what a short story is. Suggest they look for another FREE website that posts FREE literal masterpieces, with NO short stories, because these third graders need their stories over explained and repetitive.

If you're gonna critique a story, especially in an as boringly offensive manner as you do, do the author a favour -and us fellow readers, and actually critique it.

First things first, hand job, blow job, come in her mouth, swallow cum, then eating pussy, then fucking and finally anal.

Lets not forget feeling her tits, and sucking them.

You know foreplay, turn her, and you on.

Oh, was she on birth control when he shot in that baby batter, or does she have a bun in the oven.

This story had great potential, if it where mine. I'd have crashed into a tree while Kylie was swallowing a load of my cum in the car.

Then I would have been eating her shaved little sister pussy, when came to visit me in the hospital.

No jerking off under the covers, or Ky fingering herself with her panties on.

He didn't see her tits until he had anal with her.

Good read that could have been way, way better.

Build, build, build and then

oops, did you really think I would do that?

I absolutely detest it when an author thinks it is OK to mess with the readers as if it didn't matter.

I enjoyed the story and I, for one, wasn't overly concerned with the grammatical and spelling errors. The anonymous commenter, on the other hand, who claimed the story had "obviously never been proof read" should have definately had his/her comment proof read before submission. "To many" should be "too many" and last time i checked "dlete" should have another "e" in it. Pot and kettle comes to mind on this.

I agree....an excellent story...wonderfully woven...smoldering passion building...more more more...PLEASE!!!!!

Sorry I can't agree with the last two - this was an excellent story.

I would like to read more about them, though.

plus there is no end so you wasted our time. seven pages and you leave us hanging such a waste either finish it or delete it but don't leave it like this.

this is far from great, it was very sloppily written and obviously was not proofread at all. there are way to many missing words and wrong words, this is nothing but a first draft and never should have been posted. dlete and run it through a good editor then repost it and always use a good editor before posting any story.

Beautifully written!!! Would love to see more of Jason and Julie!!!!

This is my favorite story here. Great sex scenes/ adorable love story. Good job.

I loved your story and can't believe I hadn't come across it before. It was beautifully sweet and really sexy at the same time. Thanks for writing.

Just read this story for the 3rd time and found myself as thoroughly engrossed as before. Yes, it's a bit long by the standards of the average tale, but so beautifully developed it NEEDS the length. Someone comments the sibs get along too well and never argue, and he has a point. A little disagreement, amiably resolved could have added even more interest. But this episode belongs, I think, among the highest ranking on this site.

Beautiful story. I love the relationship and the slow build up. It gives a sence of connection that i really enjoy. And the time dedicated to the build up makes it much more beleivable, and much more enjoyable.

nice builds-up, milder sex, but good story thanks

I wouldn't pay too much attention to critics who thought it was too long, or too romantic. There's nothing wrong with a love story, and if they don't like it there are plenty of other stories to read.

i started to fall asleep by the end of page two it was so boring.

A strong buildup filled with multiple hot and memorable scenes. Great work! I will be checking out your others.

Given the road those two have traveled, there should be a follow up.

Knowing from personnel experience, that an incest relationship is hard to

maintain and grow, I believe you have shown these two have the ability

and love to deal with their future. Reminds me so very much of my life.

Great story. Perfect buildup. Plausible chain of events instead of stupid "porno" situations.

My only complaint is that it got a little too romantic at the end. I liked it earlier in the story when they knew they were doing something wrong but were overcome with lust.

Normally, I don't like to leave feedback or comment; but your story just toppled that habit. Amazing chemistry between the siblings, and a beautiful pace to the story. Being an author myself, it was a really good thing that you ended the story on their trip itself, or... You know, parents find out; quarrels, running from home, bla bla...

On a scale of 10, you surely topped the charts! One of my Top 10 authors now!

I like the slow-burn pace, the build-up of tension, and the dialogue - it sounds real. Definitely needs more chapters, I would like to see how they manage their relationship once the vacation's over, where they go from here.

"Hot! Anonymous" wants to know how Jase and Kylie can maintain their rlationship, and I do too. The parents are bound to realise what's going on, and most likely some of their friends will, also. And that's certainly meat for another chapter. So I hope you are working on that story, Xarth - most writers here couldn't handle so complex a tale,but I think you can. Please do!

Thanks for this story. I'm wondering how they can maintain, but then, it's a story, isn't it?

I'd prefer your stories if they had the siblings hooking up strictly for fun

It was great but honestly didnt have qlot of sex in it through the 7 pages it was still thebest ive read so far though

More longer stories.

Amazing. Simply amazing. Wish I could convince my husband to be the 'big brother' every once in a while...

My hat's off to you. You're better than I am.

This story is by far the most tittilating, arousing and exciting story I have read yet. Excellent writing and the subject matter is so different than the average run of the mill brother-sister stories found here. It totally drew me in and could imagine it being me as the brother. A total turn on. So very sorry it ended. Would love to see the story continue. Keep up the fine work.

That was a very well-plotted, entirely plausible, and very delicious story to read. I love how you first fleshed out the characters before drawing us into their carnal liaison.

...such an amazing build. Far beyond most incest stories in quality and plausibility. Great piece of work!

Thank you for taking the time writing this! I really enjoyed it.

Great story no wham bam thank you maam, both characters thought out the consequences and realized things were never going to be the same, though kylie appeared to given some thought the idea long before the trip

So many literotica stories just jump into the sex. They have no build up, and more importantly, no believablity. This story had great pacing and the characters were credible.

Just one small criticism, and believe me its minor. Sometimes the conversations were a little too pat. They agreed too much. People, even though they love each other, and want the same general things, have differences of opinion. These two agreed on everything.

That aside, great story, and it kept me coming back for more.

I was absolutley memorized by this story! It was so well written. It flowed amazingly! Please for the love of God, continue this!!!

You brought the story to life and every detail was like icing on the cake. Is there to be a second chapter ?

You keep getting better with each story. This is very well done, nice characterization, and good story development. Everything that is said, and that happens, seems like it could happen in the real world, and would naturally occur in the world of your story. Outstanding.

The extra time you put in shows, Xarthster. Your characters and their interactions are getting deeper, richer. You've still maintained your deft touch for setting a scene too. Good naughty fun all around. I'm looking forward to your climb up the favorites list.

Cheers,

PF

I've never commented on a story before but I thought this one was so brilliantly put together with excellent tension and build up. Great story, write some more ;)

Its a great story I enjoyed every word of it completly, worth way more then 5 stars, would love to see it continued off of :)

I almost never read stories this long and very seldom give anyone a five but I'd like to give this one a 35. That's a five for every single page. Freaky good story.

I really enjoyed your story, will have to read your others now. Very Good thank you.

I've been reading your stories for a while now, and I just have to say that you are my favorite author. Your stories are very believable, and so well written. Thank you for sharing your talent with the world.

I really really loved this story. Most stories i see simply get straight to the point, and most do not focus on the emotional side, or even the build up. For just randomly finding this story, i am both surprised and glad. No idea if there is a follow up or not, but going to find out now. But as Thor would say 'I like this, more!'

EXCELLENT story line and pace! There's no way to stop reading until you get to the end. I'll have to check out your other stories. Thanks for sharing!

RecHiker

This is a very well written story. The pacing of the events is impeccable, and your inclusion of their feelings gradually growing adds a sense of realism. This makes me want to write more of my own story. Great job!

Best story I have ever read.

Nicely done.