All Comments on 'On the Terrace'

Might have been a nice story, but the grammer and sentence structure turned me away.

I liked this story. It's a first time prototype with an easy premise. I like good structure and punctuation, but very few things go well unless you have experience. I want to see more because this writer does have a fresh way of presenting the tale. Actually, this story needed to be longer -- allowing for more detail about the characters and of course, the sex !! Please don't be discouraged -- it's all about keeping at it. Maybe you need to inquire about an Editor?