All Comments on 'On The Train Ch. 04'

That ending has gotta be an invitation for more! The story is getting really good, please don't stop now!

this ending certainly leaves the door open for some interesting times to cum. I am loving this story and cannot read it just once.

Amazing thank you

Can't wait to hear the rest of the story

This was a wonderful chapter in all their lives. You are a great writer and I loved the ending and we do nee to see more of how they become a loving family. Sam is a very sensual woman and her daughters are also. the scene on the pool deck was great and the final decree was a great touch. Please give us more and also continue your other series. 5 Stars as usual *****

This is one of my favorite series.

But if you continue I'm afraid it will go off the deep end. Screwing the daughter(s) to make babies? That's heading out into looney territory.

always in the cards as soon as the twins "popped up". GO ALEX!

But I really hope as the story goes on that he doesn't sleep with the daughters even if it is for something like kids. Hope the next wait isn't as long.

Seems split completely down the middle on the matter of the twins. I personally would love it if they joined in on the fun and don't think it would be a big detriment to the 'true' romance of the story. I mean, look at Union of Soviet Sisters Remarkable and the incredibly hot sex scenes, and imagine that but instead of three sisters you have a mother/twin daughters trio. And look at She Hates Me? Not! and Ms. Walker's Class (and, I assume, Telemarketing Turnabout - but haven't read that one yet), to see how well the Romance/Group sex parts are handled.

I do like the segue you put in at the end of this chapter to possibly get the twins (or at least Chloe) more involved. This way it would also be open for a more permanent thing rather than a 'one-last-time-before-we-leave-for-for-school' kinda thing.

I noticed you updated it, but I seem to recall you had mentioned on your bio previously that there were several updates you were planning, and among them I think at the time only On The Train and Here Cums The Bride (and possibly one more) were left on that list. Anything you can tell us on Here Cums The Bride? Is it in the works?

With the way you've wrote this i don't think you should involve the kids being watching; though you could definitely do some humor in keeping them from light touching/flirting. Another great chapter in one of my favorite series from you.

Amazing story. But it could be ruined with that ending. Considering she just ended a marriage because the father cheated, it's too soon for her to be at all OK with him sleeping with either of her daughters.

Unless you do artificial fertilization. Chloe could be impregnated that way. With all the money Sam is getting from the divorce, she'd be able to afford it.

Screw the naysayers. Let him sleep with Chloe.

I am really enjoying the story. Your style is great, and easy to follow.

Only you can decide where it goes from here.

1. It could end at this point and let readers use there imagination. 2. It could continue with marriage and a child with the daughter as the surrogate mother. That could make things complicated and messy. I think I prefer option one even though I am usually upset by unfinished and include nclusive stories.

1. It could end at this point and let readers use there imagination. 2. It could continue with marriage and a child with the daughter as the surrogate mother. That could make things complicated and messy. I think I prefer option one even though I am usually upset by unfinished and inclusive stories.

Amazing so far. I really like how your style flows and which ever way you go from here I am sure it will be spectacular . Can't wait for your next chapter.

Great story, love the way you put the characters together and the interesting scenes with the two kids. yes there is definitely more for these two....

Great story so far. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Please continue to submit additional chapters to this very Interesting and entertaining story.

Looking back at ch. 01 I don't recognize these people. In fact, if this is taken to another chapter how about filling in some gaps.

They met On-the-Train as they commuted into the city for work. They would leave the station together for a short walk then go their own way to their own workplace. We learned later that Frank owned his own business using it as a source for his cheating companions. And, in the divorce Samantha took her home, a beach cottage, 90% of the cash assets, and her car but no maintenance.

Other than On-the-Train and in bed who are these people? The two we met and watched as they became acquainted over a period of months as they commuted to and from their respective homes have almost no resemblance to the two in ch. 04.

Will Samantha continue to work now that she is a " . . . rich, attractive divorcée"?

Will her wealth cause issues for Alex?

What about Alex' job?

Are they matched in musical tastes, educational levels, hobbies, common friends, common interests, reading habits?

and these are but a few of the many unanswered questions.

This story has the potential of being a fun odessey. More please!

Omg how could u I mean the sex was awesome but that cliff hanger u monster

Not stop this story line.

I enjoyed all of this story

No doubt I will read it again soon

Would be wonderful if you added a few more chapters

Thank you

Kezzo

...and liked it just as much as first time-very likable characters, fun interaction, very hot sex/evenly matched high libidos, and, lucky Alex, Sam's receptive to his introducing her to back door play.

Def faved this story...

I truly enjoyed this story. If you are thinking about continuing this I would truly welcome it's writing.

More please

One of the best stories I've read. Excellent work. It would be grand to continue the life of this lucky Yong man with these three gorgeous beauties, and their three sets of twins. Thanks for your work.

Skippy

Have probably re-read this series more times than any of your others. Itis by far my favorite of your works. I hope it sees an update sometime soon. I yearn to see where this relationship with Sam is going, and to end the cliffhanger with Chloe.

I hope you make a two separate chapter for the twins being impregnated by alex

You don't need feed back to know that it screams for more. You have so many options to go forward. It's what other writers dream of. You have such a fantastic imagination. Others only dream of doing what you are doing, writing multiple stories at the same time and hitting on them all, so full of ideas. Keep going.

Five plus stars for the whole series along with a favorite point for each chapter. As it's only been a few months since chapter 4 came out, there's still hope that there will be more chapters.

As to what should happen next, I'm torn between keeping it romantic and therefore no bed time with Alex and the twins or getting down and dirty with Chloe joining Mom and Alex in their bed to get knocked up. Either way would be great as long as there are more chapters. If there's going to be no bed time with Alex and the girls, please keep the girls listening going. That was hot. Maybe you could even go to the girls watching and have it written from their POV.

This story line needs more exploring but so far been an excellent read ,but like others I too would like to hear more from this series, maybe marriage and Alex impregnating both Chloe and Cassie at a later date. I thought this could go and go for a few more chapters.

Cheers

Great. Chloe is in like Flynn and Cassie gets left out in the cold. That sucks.

You have wonderful story telling skills. The "heat" is fun, but the story telling is great!

I loved the whole thing, I, like others am torn between Chloe & Alex make a baby for Mom & he stays out of the girls pussy. I want him to be true to Sam but I want him get the young ass also. I hope ilikeithot can figure a way to do both and not piss me off. on to # 5.

All 4 chapters have kept me riveted to my seat. NOw heading to chapter 5

Really enjoyed this story, the characters were multi-dimensional and all expressed their feelings! here's a possible future storyline for Alex and his women. Alex and Sam are married, after a while Alex realizes he would like to be a Dad, Sam and the girls solve the fidelity issue by Sam collecting Alex's semen in condoms, she then refrigerates/freezes these semen samples...then when the time is right both girls are given Alex's semen vaginally, ala artificial insemination, become pregnant (each with twins) and the story proceeds with the dual pregnancies, A & S lovemaking (including anal by this time), births of 2 pairs of twins, more lovemaking between Alex and Sam and everyone involved in the raising of the kids plus more A & S lovemaking.

WOW to the 4th power!

Great fun story. Really fun and enjoyable read. Excellent.

Could you cut down on so much gasping?

How can this story get any better? Only way I can think of is that both daughters want to help their mom have a child. Being twins they could both have twins. That is a big family, getting bigger. Ken

read the lot great story you have to write more include the daughters have some fun maybe mum would like to be an observer

I know there is a part 5 but the conclusion here at the end of Part 4 is perfect. Again, I'm thoroughly enjoying the great read.

THANKS

Must absolutely be continued, the Chloe proposal being a very new perspective !!

Go hahead !!

(7/15/2021)

Oh, snap, Chloe just volunteered to be the baby mama, and there' a chapter 5. Hit that link I'm going on a diet and I need new glasses anyway.

Thank you. I am loving this story and hate the idea if it ending.

It seems difficult to say but I will try anyway, your story line and characters are phenomenal. Reading it really conjures up a flowing mental picture as I read and you describe Sam in such a vivid way that I think she is a real wet dream. And to boot, I can't imagine or recall a woman as beautiful in my mind. Therefore you must be a sorcerer of note...!

More crap.

knew the daughters could be dangerous...

you played it perfectly

Her daughters are extremely forward and very attractive. I'm having difficulty believing they are single. It all seems too perfect for the situation. Sure it's necessary for the story, but we should have had some mention of why Cassie is single. Chloe at least I can understand since she suffered a harsh betrayal recently. What about Cassie though?

That must have been very difficult to avoid writing in some threesome/foursome action. I applaud your impressive restraint. Many lesser authors would not have been able to resist.

I hope that ending isn't just some way to setup letting him fuck Chloe (and Cassie maybe). You've been doing well thus far. Hopefully you kept all the action on Sam and Alex. I hope I'm not disappointed when I read the next chapter...

Great story, really enjoying all of it