All Comments on 'Once in a Lifetime'

Sudden name change of the husband near the end. Also the sex took too long to get going.

A few grammar errors and the name change at the end was odd. I like slow build ups but without some flirting it doesn't add to the anticipation. Very well done on the descriptive sex scenes. An editor may be helpful in fleshing out your stories. Keep writing.

... PROOF READ before you Post!!

And read what is actually written, not what you intended to write!!

Spell check does not catch errors like "waste" instead of "waist". That's when I stopped reading. It's not a typo, it's ignorance.

Edit, edit, edit!!!

Just so erotically exciting as you and Chris and Kim shared amazing sexual pleasures !!!!!

Am intoxicating exciting thought. I must take a cruise. How to head away without Hubby ??

Love to find a way. Xxxxx

Really enjoyed the slow sensual blowjobs and lovemaking but I have to agree with the other comments....PROOFREAD!!

Would have been 5 stars.

nice work

A real shame that the mans name changes right at the end. Chris becomes Ron???