All Comments on 'Once Upon a Naughty Time'

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KerryLynnJamesKerryLynnJamesalmost 7 years ago
Straight To the Point

Needed a little more foreplay for the ladies, but I liked it😘

xBobbyDylanxxBobbyDylanxalmost 7 years agoAuthor

Thank you! I'll definitely keep that in mind for my next one :)

SamWarrensSamWarrensalmost 7 years ago
Chapter 2 soon?

Great first chapter.

Needs to hve a little fuller descriptions and be longer. It's a bit telegraphic. Flesh it out a bit & get the reader into the story with you.

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