All Comments on 'Once You Go Jack...'

Jack should do the Mom next and have a threesome with the sister in front of Mark!

I would rather see Mark join a rival gym...find a bisexual muscle builder...who is sympathethic to him...to beat up Jack and fuck him in his ass...then steal Melissa from Jack...and turn Jack the bully into a bitch...

Jack should do the Mom next and have a threesome with the sister in front of Mark!\

I AGREE

I'm not surprised some idiots like this but as a piece of fiction this is very bad. One of the worst I have ever read.

Nothing would make this story better than hiting the delete key.

Do us all a favor and never write another story again. This has to be the worst thing I have ever read on this site

HOT story, and I'm sure the next one will be better. Write more!

awesome story...don't stop writing. don't listen to the other commenters.

Please continue writing! Maybe when Mark's mom comes home, she'll confront Jack...and then never go back!

She can yell as Jack impregnates her that she's finally getting the son she REALLY wanted and deserved, and that Mark is inferior.

She could divorce her husband over the phone and then either throw Mark out on the street, or keep him around just to be Jack's punching bag as she and his sister watch.

Or have the other female teachers at Mark's school ignore the bullying and even openly encourage Jack because he's dominated them all.

I thought this was wonderful, I love it when women get turned on by watching one man completely dominate and bully another man, I love how she laughed at Mark's face. I also want you to continue writing more bullying stories! Now that Jack knows Melissa loves watching him bully and beat others, the sky's the limit for what bullying he will do for her pleasure!

How people like this crap is beyond me. Worst story ever.

Personally I think that including what had happened before the brother came home would have made this a better story because of the buildup / tension it would create. Good job regardless.

Excellent story - very hot. I loved the scene of the sister topless on her knees, but wish Mark could have been a bit rougher and more dominating of her. I don't think his sister needed to be a virgin.

Please keep writing on this theme, it's very hot :)

http://www.lushstories.com/stories/anal/once-you-go-jackchapter-2.aspx

That a .357 round to the antagonist's head wouldn't solve. Once Mark stops whining, gets his pistol, and puts two in this asshole's head and one in chest.

The moment when his sister has to admit that she watched for a few minutes before stepping in is one of the hottest I've ever read anywhere! Thanks!!

that was really pethetic i mean come on now make mark kill the basterd and then make him claim the girls thats what i wouldve done and probably made mark dick huge aswel

only read about1/2ofstory ... gotta get going now ... i'll read more it the moment

i'm able ... from what I've did actually read thus far ( wooooow ) { wooooooow }

[ wooooooooow ] | wooooooooooow | ({[| wooooooooooooow |]}) ... that's all

i'm able mention about ........ the person that made the comment ` when MELISSA

admitted reasons she immediately wanted fuck her brother's school bully ` ...

i'll completely agree there ... THAT'S WHEN STUFF REALLY HIT FAN

GETTING MILLIONS TIMES BETTER butttttttttttttttttt it's absolutely pathetic that

MARK didn't get even either them it's also extremely pathetic almost1yearnow

there's still no sequels ... i'll probably return after reading more possibly all

In a sequel mark should so join a rival gym. Beat Jacks ass, take Melissa back, and make them his sex slaves.

Where entitled losers think they can tell the author what to write about.

This isn't your story guys, if you don't like it, grow up and go somewhere else.

To the author, saw chapter 2 on lushstories and I hope to see a chapter 3 soon!

jack shit

LOVE MUSCLES!!!!!

Soooo... Is there a second chapter? :3

pathetic i would've killed the bully and done the sister and maybe the mother, the brother was such a wimp it wasn't even funny geez come on you should've like made it so the brother gets a forced sex change cause thats what he's acting like a weak little girl

I gave you a 5 to help offset the asshole annnoy

I agree with the suggestions that the mother should go Jack. How can she or any other woman resist? Mark will have no choice but to tongue-clean all three of them. The Mrs. Kim incident should be extended, as Jack seduces other teachers and then the principal, thus taking complete control of the school. The cuckolds, including Mark and his father, are forced to suck each other's undersized cocks while worshiping Jack's superior manhood. In other words, there is room for at least a dozen good sequels.

The one on lushstories doesn't exist anymore. Can anyone point me to where I can find it? Been dying to know what happened.

How would be a next chapter like 7 years later a buffed shaped MMA or Krav Maga Mark beats the shit and every single tooth out of Jack and makes him his bitch. Forces him to do bareback BBC gangbangs in crackaddict areas and sucking dirty grandpa/pervertdicks without his teeth. And then make him fuck his bitchsister again so they can share all the herpes,hiv etc. I would appreciate the Marks revenge ark. ;)