All Comments on 'One For the Road Ch. 02'

Your story is heartbreakingly awesome! This could be a novel, instead, you are letting us read it for free. Thank you.

It stopped rather abruptly with no "To be continued". If this is the end, then you should indicate that, and the same goes if it is to be continued. An "A" for effort, but a "C" for completion.

His gradual fall was almost painful to read!

Even as we could see where it was heading, we kept hoping he'd pull out of it.

I used to read this stuff as a boy in the 1950s. Then I grew up.

Painful as usual. Still a bit wordy but not as much as last chapter so yay. Though I will say I don't think my soul can take 2+ more chapters of this. Went from a 4 to a 5 and again ignore some of the naysayers. They don't like male bad guys unless its a btn story.

This is such a good story. It's painful but so true. I hope you don't let the relatively low score discourage you.

....but you sure can write. Thanks!

I'm liking it....Keep wrinting about James....Can he win the fight against drinking?

Why the hell is this even on this site? NOBODY wants to read this crap on a porn site. This isn't AA. I can't believe I wasted my time to even SKIM this garbage. NEVER POST AGAIN!

Painful story to read, but you are doing it well. Since this is a LW

story, I fear it is going to get much worse before it gets better, if it gets better.

Maybe not LW, but a good read all the same.

But I am not sure I like this. And from your initial comments, I have at least three more chapters of him freefalling into hell before we have a glimmer of a turn around.

Still...the tension was good. When I saw this story, I was VERY afraid to start to read it. It didn't hammer me as bad as I thought it would until the end.

I like nuanced stories. But I don't like stories of Destruction. I couldn't stand Brazil and I am having trouble with this...so far.

Let's see what is coming up.

I lived this life as a young boy and man and it is more than I wish to read about and relive again. As the other comment said this is NO column to air this kind of effort and as you said it is going on another 3 or 4 postings as such. I only read the first few paragraphs and skimmed to the end.

I will not read this author anymore. Thanks for dragging up horror memories.

The descent of a substance abuser is never pretty, nor anything most folks really want to read about. Good luck wrapping this up.

Won't read further.

But why is this in LW? Maybe we will find out. And maybe that is why this story so far did not get the best scores. BTW: 4* from me.

your in that fucked up group of man hating bitches like Vicky Tern and the rest of the round heel sluts that become man hating fags.

Noting that SOME men are less than perfect does not mean that ALL men are saints.

The saying is: no man is a hero to his butler...and probably few men are a hero to their wives. They see us when we are not our best. That Vanadorn and VickieTern note this shows they have a broader view of life.

Instead say: I do not like this type of story. I say it all the time about MM's stories. It doesn't make it bad, or poorly written. It is just disagreeable TO YOU.

Oh...and me. But I am open to persuasion. I'll give it another chapter.

Isn't it the truth though! Cheers!

Very well written, and REAL. Like your last story, you have touched nerves in everyone. There are haters out here, sure, but it's just because they see themself in ''James''. I'm not gonna even try to guess where it all is going, just gonna tag along and enjoy

However, I am wondering what it is doing here and, where this is heading in the "Loving Wife" aspect of this category?

Having seen this happen to several families in real life I am wondering which direction it is going to take for the parties involved. Will James wake up before it's too late (of it's not already) and, get the help he REALLY needs? Before he looses it all.

Otherwise, great job so far; telling a very raw life event.

It captures both a slice of society well,and it captures the addict in denial,where the booze or drugs go from being something they enjoy to something they need.Maybe this is in LW because the guy has a loving wife who lives him enough to try and save him and their marriage.The guzzle a six pack crowd might hate this,but it is well written and poignant.

Once again you are writing a compelling story that not everyone will want to read. But you are doing an excellent job. Your ability to describe characters and emotions makes us able to see and feel (heart aches for Myra and the Js) events as they are unfolding, making us care what happens to these people. Keep writing what you know. You have an unbelievable amount of talent.

To all the people who feel compelled to leave negative comments: Yes, this is an erotic story site. No, this story is not about 'fuck your neighbors wife-blowjob in the bar bathroom-spy on the teenage girl showering' or any derivative of hot monkey sex that pushes your personal button. However, there is a little something called the back arrow. If you start reading a story that you don't like, feel free to use it. You are not required to leave a nasty comment to let everyone know you didn't like it. Simply don't read the story and find one that gives you a hardon or makes you wet. The rest of us will read and let the author know hes doing a good job.

As a retired cop, you have realistically hit the nail with your characters and plot development. Most alcoholics can never recover but there are a few that finally recognize THEY are the problem and that they HAVE a problem with alcohol. That is the first step! Thanks for this exceptional story.

I see Jack Lemon in this protagonist, with a little squinting. I can only hope you reward your readers for their loyal but painful reading with an upbeat ending.

Wow another achololic in denial , does he recover or does his world collapse .well see. He will lose his family and without a income ,living pay check to paycheck her world will also collapse with no funds to pay the bills. So far a sad american tale

Thanks again to everyone for your time, votes, and comments. I appreciate it very much. Chapter 3 is complete and I'll be uploading it tonight, which means roughly Friday it should be live. I am waist deep on Chapter 4 and going along.

Once more, thanks again.

-V

The Loneliest-The Longest-The Hardest, TK U MLJ LV NV

Okay, we're still sliding down the hill, and it looks bad. I'm a sucker for a happy ending, so I hope this guy is one of the sadly few in the minority that can get on the wagon. I don't see future employment for him, and without paying the bills it is going to be a tough haul. What makes it tough for him is that he's starting already at the bottom rung with no job skills and a family to feed. I don't have a lot of sympathy for people who bitch about how tough life is for them, and they themselves lacked the foresight and patience to make it better. Yep, this guy is a sad douchebag. I feel sorry for his wife and all the wives out in the world stuck in the same situation.

Your writing skills earn the 4*s. But I don't like the story!

Too much reality. It makes me sad. Reminds me of the wreckage left in my family by an alcoholic!!

AMerryMan

Not enough hope to truly get me hooked. Very well written and conceived. Five stars.

Deserved more than he got. He's imploding and has no idea. Seen it happen, got no respect for him.

Put him in jail. Divorce and take everything. When he gets out he will be homeless, pennyless, jobless and no wife or kids. Now just a useless drunk luving on the streets. Everyone wants nothing to do with him. He finally has the lifestyle he was work8ng for. Alone and living in a homeless camp he gets stabbed. No one notices for weeks until the smell. Unknown his ashes are throw in the trash a few months later after no one claims him. Life go on.

They should throw the key away.

When was this category added?

Very irritating.

Didn't you attend high school??

You wrote: (((until I could feel her clit between my own lips.))) my OWN lips??? ... As opposed to who ELSE'S lips? I hate stupid statements like that one and we see too Goddamned many of them on this site. THINK, you so-called writers... THINK when you’re writing. Pretend that you’re hearing someone talking and saying what you write. Does it make sense or does it sound like an idiot said it? THAT is part of how you’ll improve your writing skills and stop coming across like an uneducated moron.

Here you go again: (((she grabbed my head with her OWN hand))) Are you sure she didn’t use a neighbor’s hand or possibly the left hand of God? Stuuuuuupid ... not to mention fucking annoying. Do you have the slightest clue how much shit like that distracts a reader's attention from a story? .... from YOUR stories???

...Van CAPTURES WHAT THEY DO TO OTHERS AND THEMSELVES VERY ACCURATELY. They are destructive, out-of-control, and useless.

But I’m bailing.

I personally want to kill this guy. Best to get out now while I’m behind.

That pretty well sums up where he is and where he's headed. Always someone else's fault, again; deny, deny, deny. Perfectly written about a man swirling around the drain. Signed: BTW

So well written, thanks for sharing you’re talent with us.