All Comments on 'One Loving Mother Ch. 02'

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BG187 over 9 years ago

0 if I could

That was weak you seriously need to take some time and put a serious story together. Fucking his friend? This is disappointing. The first chapter showed promise but this is just.....disappointing.

live4thebj over 9 years ago

Needs work bro

1st one was very dark and rushed. This one was way too fast.

ForbiddenTemptation over 9 years ago

I love this.

It is different. But the mother-son dynamic has been done so many times it is rare for something different to come out. The mom is borderline sociopath and I love that. I love her manipulative streak. Don't let it go to some soppy predictable romantic place. Keep their relationship as a sort of battleground.

LordSlamdawgg over 9 years ago

Not trying to be formulaic cookie cutter story

Dysfunction for days. The video references were wprked in nicely. Not very sexy but tjis seems to be a character study.

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