All Comments on 'One of those Vegas Stories'

"The four of us were coming back to add a chapter next year, if they had the money for that...They were bankrupt!!! 3*

Arousing and well written.

Pay attention! Their lawyer called them the second day and told them that the deal had been approved, and they weren't bankrupt after all.

Yeah, I gave it a five! I enjoyed it. Spen managed to introduce tension and uncertainty in a situation where EVERY one of 'Us-The-Readers' KNEW what was going to eventually happen!

PLEASE, Spen, try to not change the PoV WITHIN a sentence. The PoV of this tale is generally that of the MC (Main Character, AKA Hubby or Our Hero) but then suddenly, it is in third person ... several times! Careless!

Oh come on Spit, these people wouldn't be typing out their deranged compulsions to a mentally disturbed audience on a free site, if they had the literary talent of an average third grader.

Valid point, astute reader. I actually wrote this whole story as a full third person, didn't like it, and then rewrote it as first person. I tried to change all the them to we and their to our but I know I missed some.

As to the anonymous comments picking at the expertise of writing — get a life people, it is supposed to be verbal porn, not literature. I'm just trying to have some fun telling an erotic story.

Usually I go for short stories. But this one was so real and visual I couldn't stop reading. No one can write such a thing from imaginations. So here is annother universally recognized gesture for good shit.

You're a FLAMER and whatever you say doesn't mean anything. Those that flame other readers for having an opposing opinion are shallow and shouldn't be allowed to comment. Authors that think these type of FLAMERS help them are delusional. Spewing hatred is not constructive criticism. End of rant.

Took authors advice and didn't read story. Swinger stories are not erotic or entertaining. That's only my opinion and I have no problems with those that favor this type of erotica, but I do have a problem with the flamers who spew nothing but hatred on an erotic site.

This is a good 5* story and I'm tired of reading comments from that gay anony who always has something bad to say about bonnietaylor2. I've read some of her work and she's a pretty good writer. Go suck a dick anony and get off of her case.

Probably happens often in real life but many marriages aren't strong enough to survive it

Thoroughly enjoyed all the action and dialog, but had a problem with the bubble bath in a hot tub. Definite no-no - ruins the filters.

Otherwise a great read, even if the POV kept changing. This is PORN folks, not Lit 101. Wife loved it as I read it to her as part of evening. 5*

Very erotic and believable because it was implemented in small steps. Incremental action would improve most stories that involve a deviation from the normal action of a couple. ***** In other words; An Illicit intercourse story is improved intrinsically when it is implemented incrementally.

Very erotic and well composed.

What!?! You were in Vegas and didn't catch a show?

Unforgivable! (But a VERY hot story)

My wife and I ended up with some friends in their spa while staying with them at their house. This was after an anniversary party and everyone had consumed quite a lot of alcohol. Another lady who was the last guest left also joined us. My buddy and I were in the spa when the three ladies climbed in. My wife straddled my buddy and sank her pussy down on his hard cock and started making out with him. My friends wife and the other lady were telling each other how much they had fancied each other at a distance and started making out as well. I watched all of this and then after a while I joined the ladies and gave both of them lots of oral and made love to both of them, although I could only manage one orgasm due to too many drinks. My buddy eventually climaxed and when my wife stood up I could see his cum running down her legs. I immediately sat her on the edge of the spa and licked her clean before taking her to bed and having a very horny fuck while she described how good it felt to have two cocks almost together. Our marriage easily survived this episode and we are still the best of friends with the others. Long live free love.

Really sexy story, I love the conflict and the slow simmering build.

...until you the writer got lazy and had each couple doing exactly what the other was doing - mirror images, as it were. That's lazy writing and makes for boring reading. Shame, because this story has a lot of built-up heat going for it.

ryeandgingerayle2@yahoo.ca

Loved the story line. We have friends that we do everything with and I have often fantasized about this very scenario. This was well written, I especially loved the teasing and build up to full fledged swapping. Nice job

Another 5 stars.

Bravo! So very hot! Despite the occasional change from 1st person narrative to 3rd person, I still gave this 5*

And as good as that was, surely they couldn't wait for a year to return to Vegas to play again!

Yarnspinnerr ;->

(I have to sign my comments this way because of login issues. Are you reading this literotica.com?!)

Story about loving vermin.

Fairly standard story but I enjoyed it a lot. Thanks. 5 stars