All Comments on 'One Summer Afternoon'

A cute lovely piece, with nice buildup and reward. Thank you.

All cousins 😘 should experience such beautiful love.

Continue this story as a incest romance please

I loved this story. The only problem I have is some confusion due to the cousin/aunt/nephew relationship between Jasper and the story's narrator. I hope there are more chapters to this tale of incest and love.

I liked this story, and to be honest, your grammar and spelling in this work was better than a lot of what I see.

I would really like to volunteer, but I'm afraid I wouldn't have the time to turn your work around quickly enough.

Keep up the good work!

What a beautiful and tender afternoon delight. Wish you would add more to this. They will be there a week. How much will they share. Making love, not just fucking.

You are a master of the story. I have read all 3 and loved everyone of them.

Well written, conveying beautifully the growing lust in the nude intimacy under the hot Mediterranean sun. (I even began wondering whether yuu could be a female author.)

However you suck at family relations and some other details:

My aunt Martina and my mother, Martha, are cousins'

'Jasper, we're cousins.'

'I looked at Jasper but he had his eyes closed. I wanted to feel my nephew's gorgeous male sex organ inside me.'

-- Decide which story you're telling!

and:

'The other was, it was secluded with a wall around a beautiful garden.'

'The whole terrace felt like it was an oven and he led me to the low fence on the edge, above the slope.'

Such details are not important per se, but resulting cognitive dissonances breaks the readers' perceptual flow.

Dear,

Thanks for the comments on three of my stories. It's critique that is right and helpfull. So I aim to do better the next times...

Regards, Sailorsix

Your mom's cousin would be your first cousin once removed, not your aunt.