All Comments on 'One Summer in New Orleans'

you keep throwing all those hyphens into the story. It's beyond annoying.

While I liked a lot of the aspects of your writing I would click off another one if it was full of hyphens like that.

Sometimes writers do that to keep it from getting scraped. It's unnecessary. There are better ways.

It's totally my fault. I submitted my story in .doc format and Word inserted the hyphens at the sentence breaks which were in different places when it was posted. I should've just submitted in .txt format like I was advised. I only did it in .doc to keep some words italicized. There are also grammatical mistakes that are NOT in the version I submitted. I don't know what's up with that. I would be happy to make the edits myself, but I'm not sure how. Thank you so much for the feedback as I was wondering why it was being voted so low.

I felt I really got to know the mind set of the main character.

It all seemed very real.

Would love to read about these people.

I am one of those foot fetish husbands, & hence my name is

SoleBrotherJeff

I came over and over again with this. Perfect.

Was your pussy shaved or trimmed?

Was he shaved/trimmed?

Did Phil figure it out? Did he immediately eat and then fuck you?

Wish so much you'd said MORE about the other sex you had with him....

Just loved how he entered you.

So what happened to them?

Well written story.

Good beginning!

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