by sailorsix
I have read many literotica stories and this one was probably my most favorite one.
I was very disappointed when you first posted this a few weeks ago as it was clearly unfinished. I hereby take back all my unkind thoughts, this is an excellent piece of work. For someone who does not use English as their first language it is superb. You could probably do with an editor to correct a few minor errors in colloquial usage but that's all. More please.
very nice lustful story of LOVERS not just bro and sis having blissful sex
Just LOVED it
I don't rate too many stories with 5 stars but if I could I would give it 6. Please more!
I started reading this and was about to go to another story but this one got better and better until I realized I was rock hard! PLEASE keep it going!
Better, but you still need a proof reader. Several typos and mistakes were present on both pages.
Not a bad story, but please get an editor. The mistakes take away from a nice story.
please keep it going, this could develop into a very loving and sexy tale.
Aside from the typos, the blending of her earlier sexual experiences into her true desire for her brother was nicely done. Keep going.
5 stars. Loved this story... please more of this story..
thank you.....
Your story was so arousing and showed his sister's trust and love to share probably the most intimate thoughts and feelings she has for her brother much beyond just being a sibling. Raw passion, love, tenderness plus so much more. That he loves and trusts her equally and now they have a strong sexual bond that won't be broken. I hope another chapter or two happens soon and that they become lovers and continue to feel these loving moments and stay open to each other. For his sister to think this out and take the chance after a year of soul-searching and desire; is so wonderful. Thank you.
Thanks for the encouragement and feedback so far! I'll get this story to an editor, so an update will follow. The comments concerning grammer etc.also had a point.
Not bad. Incest is not an easy subject to write. Keep it up.
Good story. Would benefit from the input of an editor as you've said... Would love to hear more about this couple. Looking forward to reading more of your work.
Damn, you are good. Your story is so incredibly sensuous, you surely experienced this yourself....
I can't add much to what those who commented before me said. Some editing might have made this story perfect, but I don't need perfect. I have the feeling that English may not be your first language and if so, you have done remarkably well!
I value most the way you told the story and it's content. Very well done! Thank you for making my day.
Such a romantic, erotic sibling story. Makes me wish I had a sister like that...
This story could go a lot farther,It might even be a great one. PLEASE keep writing.... BROTHER & SISTER Stories come in second for me ,but this one could be my #2. thanks for the read.
Nice descriptions of hot lust for brother & sister engeaged in a taboo act without caring what others think.
5 stars!