All Comments on 'Onus 04'

Great chapter. I was confused at first thinking I had missed something from the end of the third chapter to now so I reread the third chapter. If that was your ploy it worked, but I don't mind I love your stories!!

This story has cruelty, but let's face it for a lot of our world, there is only cruelty. Goodness and fair play don't always live in the world of the ostracized. We can do better, but most times we ignore and subjugate what is different. Hey, it's a story and hopefully what we take from it is when given a choice - do better & help. Don't prostitute, humiliate, take advantage of, make a quick buck off of or gets your dark rocks off of a weaker person.

Just my thoughts. Great writing! Makes a person think & feel.

Cunty car - that made my day :-0).

I just want to hold and comfort Shiloh He's so lost and scared. At least he finally found his voice, even if it was only one word. Hopefully he'll get more comfortable talking. Sam is wonderful and I look forward to finding out more about him.

This gets better and better. Thank you!

This was such an intense beautiful chapter, i had to go through the previous chapter first 'cos I some how missed it.

Please update sooner than several months.

Make me sad!

I want to know what happens to this poor kid!

Thanks for writing!

Each story that you put up gets better and better. Keep coming with the suspensefullness.

Delighted to see another chapter about Onus. It's been awhile, so I had to drop back to chapter three to pick up the story thread.

Though I enjoyed this chapter, I wish you had written more and taken us through to the other side of the operation.

Don't make us wait too long for the next chapter.

I'm glad to see another chapter. I would have loved for it to have been longer and after so long, it would have been very satisfying for Shiloh to have spoken to Sam before the surgery. Hopefully it will be all the sweeter when they do have that moment. It would have been a big step in their relationship and the timing would have been good...so you will be challenged now to have their first 'conversation' and Shiloh's first words be done in a touching and emotional way. It was so sad when he finally said Sam's name and Sam couldn't hear it. That sucked!

It has been so nice seeing him begin to trust Sam. Afterall, the way he and other Onii had been treated, it would have been understandable for him to never trust another human. That ride through 'enemy territory' was really effective as a way of letting us feel like we were in that chair with him and allowing us to experience what it was like for a Onus in this society. It seemed clear that he only got through that ride b/c he knew Sam would be at the other end and in his heart, or subconsciously, he knew that Sam would make arrangements to keep him safe.

I just hope that when he wakes, he isn't set back too far by the knowlege that he'd been kept for 4 yrs. I hope he can concentrate on the fact that he has found a safe place to be. 4 yrs. of hell and it was so traumatic the poor little guy didn't even have an idea that it had been that long. I want to vomit hearing all that was done to him. I hope he can have a chance at a good life now.

I am really wanting to know more about Sam. What happened to him? What made him take Shiloh in? I am also wondering if he is important enough at the hospital to have his own spot, how is it that he has been home with Shiloh? He must still be working there, so did he take a leave of absense or something? Will he be able to stay home a bit longer with Shiloh? I don't think shiloh is ready to be left alone all day. Sam is a really good man and I am glad that he and Shiloh have each other. I really hope we can see them bond more and learn a bit more about Sam. Something tells me that Sam needs healing of his own and that Shiloh can help him as much as he will help the little Onus. I really want to know the answers to the questions above soon!

I was a tiny bit surprised that he didn't spend more time preparing Shiloh for the fact that he'd have to be on his own with Oliver and that he'd have to go through the hospital to another wing. He has been almost overly hesitant with Shiloh, explaining every little thing at home and making careful motions around him and reassuring him, so he really threw him into the deep end, making him face getting to the OR without him. He had to know it would throw the little guy to be separated from him and put with someone he didn't know . I felt so badly for Shiloh as he was wheeled through the hospital. You did an EXCELLENT job of showing what it was like to be an Onus. The way they were treated so poorly and outwardly abused, unwanted, hated even. Your heart has to go out to them, or at least the ones like Shiloh, who are only victims too. They didn't ask to be born.

I have to go back b/c I just can't remember how they came to be since I read it so long ago. That is the hard part of when a story comes out with such long periods between chapters. But, I appreciate that you do continue to work on it. I have so many stories that I bookmark, tons, that will most likely never be continued. It is always a pleasant surprise to see a new chapter for a story you hoped would be continued. I had faith that you would though...i just was unsure when it would be. I hope you can work on this and get another chapter soon. I know from the authors I beta for, that when the characters from another story start buggin them to have their story told, they have to go with it...but I hope shiloh and Sam start pushing at you to finish their story. I hope we see more soon!

amazing world, amazing characters, lots of angst.

I was so glad to see the story was updated. Read it a long time ago and was dying to know what happens next.

Glad too see the luck of our poor Onus has changed. I'm curious about the new character. He seems exceptionally nice and good, so I am interested to know how he ended up buying the Onus in the first place. Also what's with the mask... Still lots of mystery remaining.

To the author:

I'm sure your true fans are more than patient to wait for updates. I certainly am. You have a talent we are lucky to enjoy.

To inpatient readers:

Writing is art - can't rush or force art.

This was great! Any sure there was a long wait between chapters but it made me so much more excited to see an update :) the sadness and tragedy of his life is so moving and sad. I hate that he and his kind have gone through so much and felt so much pain but that only makes the healing that much better. I hope they can heal each other because it sounds like the man with half a face has seen a lot of pain as well. Can't wait to read more.

Oh my gawd!!!! I love every single one of your pieces, but this one is my absoulte favorite!! I love your style, I love how dark and sad and moving it is. You are my idol!!!!

I love the stories you just freaking pull from that awesome mind of yours lol I know I'm gushing but seriously I like the way your mind works. Please never stop 😘