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The heater was still there, but I still shivered convulsively.
Because I could stand, I saw when the older man was walking down the hallway. I saw him heading towards my stall.
He came in and brushed my wet hair. Raked through it with a comb. He grabbed the hair near the root to insure that he wasn't pulling too much, but it still hurt a little. When my hair was hanging soft and white as silk around my ears, he nodded, satisfied. He took a handkerchief from his pocket and licked a corner of it. He used the damp corner to wipe my tear-streaked face.
"Going to a new home, beastie." He grunted.
I felt scared. But mostly, I just felt numb.
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*If that made you uncomfortable, I'm sorry, but the worst is yet to come.
I predict this story being between 3-5 chapters. It just recently became clear to me that I will be able to finish this story (not always clear by the beginning) and I have the second chapter finished. I'll release the second chapter in two weeks time, and hopefully have the third chapter ready two weeks after that.
And if not?
I'm slow, but I've always come through in the end. Onus is a story that will be told.
Also, quick update. I mentioned a possible sequel to File 66 a few months back, and don't lose hope! I had writers block on it for a month or so, but now I'm back into the swing of things.
You'll all have an update on Tam and Taylor sometime soon.
Everything else is uncertain, but some ideas have promise.
Kisses and Spanks,
--Cruel*
- COMMENTS
mandarinandbasilabout 5 years agoI absolutely love all of your stories! And as someone with pretty severe sensory issues I'm excited to read more about the onus.
Anonymousabout 7 years agoIt's just a word, acting like it is something sacred that can never be said only gives it more power and doesn't help anything. Once people use it as just another insult thats what it will simply become and then maybe we can move on from trying to police language.
Anonymousover 7 years agoNot to take anything away from your story, but stop using that word. It's not okay, not even if you're black. It's not "taking the word back" or whatever. Some things should just die. That disgusting word, and all its connotations, should be obliterated from all language except as a cautionary tale, an example of what happens when we subjugate someone for just existing with a slight difference.
StillnessIsTheTruthalmost 9 years agoJust read the first chapter and think it's really, really, really good! I get that the main character is timid but it was a bit grating at times. However, the scope of the story is brilliant and I think you're onto something wonderful here! I'm gonna read the the rest of the story but IDK if I'm going to comment because some of these Literotica commentators are just childish and dumb! How the hell are these people gonna read a warning you made for them and then like... read it anyway and be upset with how cruel the story turned out to be?
Anyways, bruh! You just earned yourself a wicked little fan! For anything, email me at montrezrambo@gmail.com
roughboy18over 9 years agoI can't say I loved this first chapter -- it was a difficult read. But I will say I can't wait to read the next. :-) Love how inventive this story is, and the backstory about the white pony -- heartbreaking and very well done. You've brought me right into this world with wonderful descriptions of taste, touch, feel. I'm right there with Shiloh, going through his fear and agony. I won't forget this story anytime soon.
