by Snekguy
I am usually not so in favor of power and arms display, but I've read and liked quite a few of your stories involving Borealans.
"Or Die Alone" is a very good one, with the long - and thrilling - narrative of the treck through the icy desolation, and the slow team-building staged between Boyd and Lorza. Not to mention the passionate sex scenes.
The end of the Syndicate is a jewel. Thanks for your stories.
Brilliant work as always. Though the fetish continues, the plot changes once more!
But there's an icy moon orbiting a hot desert world, both with atmospheres where human can live with. The Science isn't so much as weak as it has been locked out of the room.
I love your "Pinwheel" stories. And this was a wonderful long juicy story for a Sunday. Thanks.
Your writing never ceases to amaze me! Pinwheel is one of my absolute favorites as is the alien fetish. You are a master of your craft! Looking forward to the next installment! =o)
I'm loving the stories you have coming out of the Pinwheel Universe. I hope to see such a well thought out story continue to expand.
That he has zero gratitude, and does not share important info needed to either survive or accomplish the mission, bugs me enough to stop at page 7. If I get curious, I might start again, but there is a problem with inconsistent motives and actions.
Hi. A long story, I read as was interested in the story rather than the sex. TBH the idea of an oversized furry female alien doesnt do a lot for me, after the first sex scene just skimmed over the next sex scenes. The story was good, the use of the rebreathers got a bit vague during the transit of the ice planet, I must of missed where the two heros had decided they didn't need the rebreathers any more.
I have enjoyed everything that you have written so far. But I must say that everything in the Pinwheel universe is undoubtedly my favorite.
Love the big cats! Hope to see more of these two UNNI agents in the future. Maybe you lost some in the details, but it was the story that carried this through. Love it!
Semper Fi!
Good as alway, but! The railguns bug me. Way too weak! Modern KE penetrators are 20-30 mm in diameter, too. And they are accelerated to over 5000 fps in normal tank guns. Only half the speed of your railgun projectile. So to pulverize a small area on the surface from space, way more than the 4 kilometers of normal tank gun precision, they gotta have a lot more punch. More speed! And a lot more mass. To make it through the atmosphere.
Good read as always. Thanks to the author for creating such a magnificent universe. All the stories have so many details in descriptions of the planets and the environment. It is very easy to give in to ones imagination and submerge into fictional surroundings.
This story, however, has a non-fictional word "mudak" thrown very casually. As a speaker of Russian language, I want to point out that the word is very offensive. In no way does it mean a "small child" and in no way it can ever be endearing. No matter how close is the person who says it.
I think the author is looking for "malish" ("малыш"). A Russian word which can be both offensive and endearing, while actually meaning a "small child".
Anyway, I'm not sure if the story will be re-submitted over a single word, but it did bother me a lot. Anytime I tried to submerge into fictional surroundings, it a was the single thing that brought me back to reality.
I missed a few of your newer stories with the sites recent upgrades it seems. Glad you kept Korza as a recurring secondary character, there was always something about him I liked.
It would be interesting to see how a human pacifist & a Borealan would interact.
It seems that Boyd has read the art of war. I think it should be read in the unn soliders to become better.
Great story! Thank you very much.
But ... the sex between human and female Boralean got boring - it's more or less always the same roleplay, you're even repeating the same wordings. (You like oversized women? ;-)
Maybe you could think of a male Boralean and a female human?
Keep on!
I've read most of your works, I think the best part out of all of the is the fact that they all are linked together in away where you can see the point of view from characters in all the stories as they interact with main characters, looking forward to reading more!!!
Most of your Borealan stories are already kind of samey, but 22 pages for one story? Jesus, I'm not slogging through that!
But check a dictionary for the difference between phased and fazed.
I especially liked the ending space battle. Your setting is fantastic
Not sure if your writing is just getting better or the fact that there is more plot and less "downtime" in the story. Either way..
"Lorza" is a fitting name for a Polar. It means "love handle" in Spanish
Excellent series that continues to tie all characters together with the UNN saga of adventures....
This one really needs a sequel. It almost seems like it wants to write itself as a Polar who becomes a Ninnie. Great job.
I really enjoyed the parts where the UNNI special agent was at the forefront, the intrigue in the beginning and fighting and dodging the Syndicate was fun. It was also fun reading the description of the very hostile aquatic wildlife on the moon they crash landed on and the endless stalking it was doing. Didn't really care for the sex scene at all, mainly after the mentions of how casually Polars apparently treat sex and how their villages are essentially just large hippie orgy communes. Ended up skipping just about all of it to get on with the story.
Sorry. Lost me on page 5. Here we have some highly trained agent, who somehow doesn't notice the massive Polar walking with him eating all the food. Then seems to have zero understanding of basic sub zero survival techniques, thereby refusing to share body heat in the sleeping bag? WTF. And at no time did he re-enter the crashed ship to make sure he secured anything, nor did he check the backpacks before venturing forth. She was in a mad panic, of course she would miss things and grab things haphazardly.
Just read the updated version on your website (snekguy.com/stories/pinwheel/or-die-alone/) and I have to admit that this older version is by far superior. I appreciate the extra effort you went to to add more detail, but the changes -especially after Boyd and Lorza are picked up, changed and elongated the best features of the tale, tale without improving it, and dumbed it down more so.
Please don't remove this version from this site!
The sex scenes were probably eight to ten times longer and more repetitive than they needed to be. Too formulaic to be enjoyable. Honestly, they remove the momentum from the story and introduce a level of cringe that forced me to scroll FAST to get past them..
Boyd really did embody the term 'mudak'. Lorza gave him the translation of child, which is technically incorrect, but he acted like an adult child, and so child could be an accurate translation based upon her sarcasm.
urbandictionary dot com/define.php?term=Mudak
Not sure I would go for a polar (not a fan of the tubby) or take my chance with a submissive equatorial (Zahari is so cute with her engraving). Maybe an Araxie is more my style.