by hotjacquettam
As with the other parts I found it enjoyable and interesting. Waiting anxiously for the next part. A great job!
Is this truly the first time you have written? The action is super. Yes, you could develop the personalities and descriptions of the players, but why bother.
Got a chapter 5 in mind???
Thanks Don
Starting to dislike this. Second chapter was virtually rape this was brutality as his mum was not into the beating. She only allowed it because she is frightened of him.