by M.R. Alicante
...but better than average story. The American characters are drawn fairly well. The others are cardboard figures. Cartoon villains from a 60's beach party movie.
But you are letting the modest story line unfold at a reasonable pace and with decent characters to follow it is a good read.
Eric
A good start I hope you have enough imagination to explore all the possibilities. Doer
I smell swapping and wimp husbands not too far away.
Shame - could be a great story without that crap.
In the first submission someone(handle unknown) dumps on the possibility of swapping. Hey dork head the title of the area is "Loving Wives". If you don't like this type of writing then look elsewhere to get your jollies.
For me this story is going along just fine and I am awaiting the conclusion--go to it M.R.!!!.
Bub wasn't too shy to accept a BJ from his friend's wife without knowing it was ok with him. Fairly far out behavior. But now he's almost apoplectic that she'll show him her tits. Inconsistent. New wife is seriously shy & believes hubby is too. So she goes topless & bottomless without even discussing it with him. She's worried about how he'll react to her being topless, so she thinks she will allay his concerns by going bottomless? She would rather fulfill fantasies she never had rather than stay married to her new husband? Contrived. She should be reluctant and only submit to peer pressure hesitantly rather than keep volunteering to up the ante.
Keep going Bub, get in a boat, leave the island and the whore behind.