All Comments on 'Our Story'

Great story! Just a little critique, if I may. Most of the story is written in past tense, but the are a few times where you slip into present tense. "Raising my legs up so they are partially around his back..." Change "are" to "were" and you take care of the problem. I usually quit reading a story where the story changes from past to present and back again, but your story line captivated me. One more little critique...I don't know if any of your true feelings are weaved onto this story, but let me assure you...if a man goes down on you out of his own free will, he is not disgusted by the aroma. He is genuinely turned on by it. Lie back and enjoy the ride! I see you have other stories available. Gonna go read those now!