All Comments on 'Out For A Walk Ch. 01'

But this is too fucked up for me.

..............not at all fucked up for me!

The storyline was quite good but there was one huge problem; it started in the first person directly from Jack's perspective and then towards the bottom of the page shifted into the third person indirectly from both his and Kate's perspectives. That is a big leap for the reader to take and made an otherwise reasonable story quite jarring to read. If it is kept in just one perspective from now on, either first or third but not mixed, then this will be a good series so long as they don't involve loads of other's in their fun.

Surprised there's only 3 comments. Just a mild peeping and BDSM story. Not actually incest, since they have no genetic relationship. Not terribly exciting, at least to me.

1 star