by sirreadsalot10
There is only one thing I want to say ... MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE ... I hope I have made my self clear!!!!
please keep them coming. I look for a new outlander everyday and was very excited to see this one today
I know you had trouble writing this chapter (and trouble writing further ones.) I just want to say thank you for the time and effort you put into these stories. I will continue to wait patiently for the next and any following chapters. I really appreciate your efforts.
As for the story, Jack really does have a lot to think about and take in. I do hope Karin will be five copper richer.
I find this story and your ability as a story teller to be excellent. I like how you build your character development and you dont hurry. I would really like a chapter or so a week though.
Thanks and please carry on.
it was an interesting and engaging chapter well worth the wait
can not wait for the next installment
... it is an excellent chapter.
Now, please do not make us wait too long for the next one!!!!
You're doing a great job of laying the foundations for the world. Looking SO forward to the conflicts to come!
Thank you for your excellent story!
I hope we will not wait so far for the 7th chapter.
It is very interesting the christian mitology Zoroaszter type change: dualis World with fight of the Evil and the Good from the old Persian religion and the nowdays Parsi religion. Aveszta's world and the New Testament'world encounter, it is very interesting. BTW I respect the Parsi' religion and its 200000 followers.
I'm glad you are not forcing the sex into the story. Although I really did enjoy Young Wolves, the pacing was a bit off. In this story, I feel you're doing a better job of taking the time to tell your story as you intended it. Great job and keep it up!!
this is only getting better by the chapter. J really is something, eventho he doesn't seem to think so himself; getting up every time isn't something a lot of people can do.
I just got caught up with this series. Thanks for recommending it. You tell a good tale my friend. I will be very interested to see where you take this story. I can't wait to see how bad ass Jack becomes!
The story is very well written and the characters are well described. I can't wait to read more about jacks adventure. Only bad thing I have to say is that it took over 3 months for you to post this chapter, please don't make us wait =)
Don't generly read sci fie/fantasy, but this story is to good to miss. I am glad you chose to use sex as a storietelling tool rather than a cruch to atract readers.
However, you need to keep in mind author, that your readers are waiting an awful long time, and receiving morsel sized scraps in return.
You see the story is getting more and more complex as it moves along, so what do you think this effect has on your readers? That's right! They forget important or critical parts of the tale. Some may look at it and admit that they no longer wish to follow because the author takes so long and when he DOES deliver, the quality is sublime, but the length is just long enough to tease.
Think about it please.
Great work lad!
You have the gift of a story teller - loved this almost as much as the wolves one.
Can't wait for the sequels. Keep up the good work!
Gr8 story script gr8 narrative imagination plz finish tis series 1st man f al m realy looking 4rward to more f ur amazing work
cary on man
Can't wait until he becomes the almighty warrior... if he becomes one >.>
I wonder what is going on inside the giant/child. The idea that you only cure things that are broken or open wounds would be a good idea for toughening up warriors.
I like the analogy explaining the leylines.
The story is well written, and the characters very human, although Ava's reaction to seeing his genitals doesn't seem realistic in the circumstances.