All Comments on 'Paradise in Hawaii Ch. 02'

by JimInHI

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Great story!

1st part was best but why such a long wait? This story has such potential. Would love to see more. But 2 hours to go 9 miles in a zodiac?

I hiked that trail in the '70s when everyone hiked it nude and there were hundreds of naked hippies living in the canyons. Ah, the good old days!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Need more story build up

Having hiked most of this trail, and having thoroughly enjoyed Part 1 of the story, I couldn't wait for Part 2. The best part of Part 1 was the long build-up, but Part 2 went straight to the 'action'. I enjoyed Part 2, but I would suggest a Part 3 with more story leading up to things, perhaps with encounters with other couples, the police that frequents the area, hiking along side trails, etc.

26thNC26thNCabout 2 years ago

Horny apes whore around.

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