All Comments on 'Pathetic Ch. 00: Prologue Pt. 01'

Oh no! It started off so happy. I wonder if Brett is actually a jerk or scared if being judged but either way that still makes him a jerk. Please continue this story!

I agree. Poor Luc deserves his HEA! But I don't think it should be with Brett. Too much shit happened so quickly.

Also, your writing is really pretty good but be patient about the editing. The next installment could benefit from just basic proofreading (grammar, punctuation, missing words,etc...).

Good Luck!!!

I want u to continue with this story. Brett deserves no happy ending with Luc and I hope Luc can find love. He deserves happiness even though he will take a long time to get there becuz of his trust issues. Please keep going with this story don't end it with such a sad ending.

For Lucca to have been such a bad judge of character is truly tragic. Still, you're writing is great and a sequel that begins to bring this tragedy together with something redeeming would be greatly appreciated!

how fast professed love turns to hate because of our upbringing and later our peers.

I am not sure he should ever allow Brett to touch him again. It was cruel for Brett to profess his feelings and then leave Luch to be kicked and beaten. In real life that is sexual abuse at its worse. I liked your writing and where the story was going.

I myself, many years ago had a lover who left me to the "wolves" and so perhaps this story just opens old wolves. We shall see.

Finish the story

Can you pleaaaaaaaase finish???

You are brave to post here. People leave the craziest comments I have ever read on a site, they are insane... Good story by the way :) keep writing!

Don't you realize this shit happens in real life?

Excellent writing, kipp!

*****

This story has a great plotline so far, but the editing needs some SERIOUS help.

It is Luca, not Lucca.

Lucca is a city in Italy, Luca is the equivalent of Luke.

Source: I'm Italian, born, raised and still living there.

Except that... Nice beginning! I will read all of the chapters!