All Comments on 'Patteran Ch. 01'

That was something else, interesting and a little strange but once I began to follow the storyline, I really got into it. Great job.

this story shows promise,im interested in seeing whats put in the next chapter

Your prose is delicious and the characters are textured and intriguing. And it's delightful to discover so many surprises in the nature of your vampire; she's not just a recycled cliche. Well done.

You really did your homework for this one! I loved it. The story was amazing and the characters were well thought out and developed!

It's witty and the characters are richly described (love the Kali references). Continue, if you can. I'd love to see how the rest of the story comes together.