All Comments on 'Payback Ch. 03'

And still there are more questions that haven't been answered.

I am really enjoying the style of writing, even though it is a very discomforting story. Things like the way that Pearl came into the story and then her parentage was later revealed are quite clever.

I am astonished at the current low score and the lack of comments so far. I do hope there are more readers on the Literotica site yet to read this episode. It is an exceptional story, well worth following through to its conclusion.

I still hope for a happy ending, but a sense of foreboding remains.

Lue

I just checked back on the score. It is now 4.45. It was 3.something last time I looked. More appreciative readers must have found it.

Lue

The writing and storytelling is just stellar. The plot is complex and the characters are compelling and very human. I read, and I want to know more about these people and their world. In my opinion this is the best LIT has to offer, and like Lue, I wonder why more readers haven't noticed. The author's library is impressive as well. I'm anxiously awaiting another chapter and I sure hope there is more.

It’s nearly midnight and I’ve just finished ch 3. Thought I’d just check out the first page but as always you hooked me. Great job with this one, really getting into the nitty gritty. 5*

The dual timeframes, the mysteries still to unfold, the characters coming alive, even the minor ones, this is turning into a tour de force.

What a story so far! Engrossing!

What a contrast between kinetic and potential energy. The gut wrenching anticipation for the revelation of whatever tragedy led to the murder of the boys, and the hope against hope for deliverance for Ciaran and Helen. The tension is intense.

Sad but all too common manifestations of racism (in both directions). People have an incredible capacity for cruelty at their basest levels of behavior. Humanity! Ha! What an oxymoron!

This is a very powerful piece of drama. I'm going to have to reread this in its entirety when it's finished to have the benefit of continuity. But for now, I can't wait for the next chapter. Thanks for a great story.