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attorneys should know better -- such activities would result in a VERY expensive litigation and a very wealthy young paralegal ... if they don't all end up in prison.

Yes, REAL attorneys would know better. Feel free to put a pin in that.

So, I can see that you’ve built off your learnings from the earlier piece - showing that each piece of writing gives you a chance to refine character and story scopes.

Again, pay attention to the spelling and grammar (it can annoy fussy readers).... and I like where your mind goes.

It’s an interesting contradiction with the nasty behaviour mixed with the compliments, but I wonder if you’d get a bigger tingle by elevating the men’s behaviour to a more seductive and less ‘football team pack rape’ story (but then again, that’s my fantasy and may not be yours - which is more important, as you’re telling the story)?

As you see, practice does indeed make perfect...