All Comments on 'Personal Cock Slut'

I see this was your first try at writing an erotic story. Welcome to Loving Wives. I give you 3 stars for the brave effort but honestly it wasn't very erotic. Too much dialogue and not enough emotion. How do the characters feel about what they're doing? Also not enough visual description. Tell us how things look. Read other authors to see how to write hot erotica. I recommend newbie2008. You have a spark of promise. Keep trying. It's easy to criticize, much harder to practice what I'm preaching, I know.

The idea isn't new, but it's good...The problem was that only in the end we knew more about the characters...and that wasn't enough...But as a 1st effort isn't bad...Keep trying...3*

dont pay attention to assholes. if they had any real talent they would write thier own stories

Hater: Noun. Definition: someone who can't stand it when others dare to have a different opinion.

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BTW, it's an assumption that this is a different opinion since this bozo didn't mention anything about the story.

Well , i see you have a bunch professionals here reading your stories !

i think it was great , keep doing what you do , it is awesome !

i gave it 5*. reason, you ask. because this is a true story. knowing this author, as i do, i'm 99.9% sure this is real. this author has enough excitement in her life, so, there is no need to fabricate anything.

i see no need to embellish a true story, as all her stories are.. this is written exactly as it happened.

please keep posting,

pete (you know who i am).

Look at all these anonymous bitches complaining about other commenters not writing. Then there is Pete, assuring us that this whore's story is 100% true. Bullshit!