by lilamisakh
Completely uncharacteristic. An insult to very beautiful characters and what could have been a good story. What a shame.
Utter shit. A Christine is brunette and B) you've wrecked lovely characters. The phantom isn't evil just lonely. Go watch the film moron!
First of all Phantom is just lonley not a true killer.
Second, He would be soo kind and gentle when he made love to her.
Third, I reccommend reading the book and watching the movie.
If you could do those three things in another book, it would be WONDERFUL!!!! :) :) :) :O
So please right another book and, Pleaseee, from all us Phantom fans, don't mess it up :(
It was good but it needs a lot of work.
First: The phantom's name is spelled Erik NOT Eric.
Second: Erik would never EVER rape Christine. Sure, he would kidnap her from Raoul but would NEVER rape her. It's totally out of character (OOC).
Please, do make another one, but make it more gentle.
By the way, there are some spelling errors that I noticed so be sure to fix that!
This is the best one I've seen. It is totally unlike the Phantom. He wouldn't do that to her, at all. He may kidnap her, but she wouldn't call him all those things, nor would he, and she wouldn't think those things about him. It is totally unlike Christine as well. Not cool, at all. Didn't like it...
Have you read the book the musical's based on? It's implied pretty heavily in there that he, in fact, DID rape her. Also, the Phantom in the book was a very nasty person with few scruples. He definitely could have done something like that to her. (I will agree, however, that her reaction seems pretty off based on her character.)
Okay, okay not bad. It needs work but it's not completely unfixable. Point A; The Phantom's name is spelt with a 'k' rather than an 'c'. Second of all review your spelling and grammar errors. For example: "....her eyes widen with revelation..." The word there would be 'widened' because it's past tense. Your third mistake was Erik in general. He is fairly tall, but he is a walking skeleton! He is not 'buff, and he most certainly doesn't have a nose. You were correct in saying that Christine Daaë was a blond because that is how she described in the book, however. Finally, they were WAYYYYYY out of character. Erik loves her and would NEVER harm his Christine. Plus it would upset her to much if he murdered Raoul, he might want revenge, but he would never rape her. Sorry if this was cruel, but it had to be said. Please take this into consideration. -RH