All Comments on 'Pick Up'

this is a bit stilted and rough. Hard to hold to with incomplete thoughts and sentences.

Potential for the story remains beneath the surface.

Thank you for the comment- it is very helpful.

Not enough here to give a decent rating.

this seems incomplete. i think it needs more added

Revenge is a dish best served hot in this tale of a Pick Up to spite a boyfriend. As if to

make the message clear she photographs the tryst and.makes sure her boyfriend gets the picture. Short and sweet and to the point, Pick up is an excellent slice of life story in the digital age.

Weak story, bad writing. Maybe I was a little harsh, it might qualify as 10 grade, the did use the fuck word.