All Comments on 'Picnic on Pebble Beach'

It's nice to read a story based around love and tenderness once in a while. It could be written a bit better, but it really would not improve the story. I enjoyed it thoroughly. Keep writing. Thank you.

Wow what a beautiful story i really enjoyed it keep writing.

seems a normal guy would have either moved or changed his name after she left so she would be able to find him and hurt him again. people do not act like this no way he would accept her back. she betrayed and hurt him to badly for him to forgive her especially after twenty years.

A nicely done storyline and well written story.

The story leaves this reader wanting to read about their lives after they reunited.

It would be sweet to read.

Thanks for the read.

I hope i don't end up waiting like Eric. I kinda feels draining...nice story by the way.

-Waterboy

your bittersweet tale of love and betrayal has truely moved me almost to tears wish there was a sequal

I really liked this story!

But very real. That's why I gave it 5.

Nicely captures the struggle of overcoming the taboo. It seemed real and heartfelt.

to short needed a few more paragraphs to finish it off. the most realistic end would be for him to say " YOU HAD YOUR CHANCE AND SCREWED IT UP YOU DON'T GET A SECOND" of course the most realistic would have been for him to have changed his name as said before and leave half the money for the house with a lawyer for her. no one forgives like that after what she did no way in hell he would ever want to see her again been there done that hopefully will never see them again.

You captured the dilemma of a loving pair of kids,buggered up by the dictates of our society.

I did like it!

Damn I like this story.

smoking. Big, big, turn off for me.