by PrincessJezebel
"She wasn't sure why, but she did feel she could trust him." Lost all credibility.
@Bierce--Thanks! I just got off of Facebook, and I was trying to click "like" on your comment. :)
Thanks also to everyone for your votes and comments. I was afraid I wouldn't even get the 25 votes to qualify, and I've had 144 in the first two days. Now I believe the guy who wrote the article on "Why You Should Enter Contests."
@the Anonymous with whom I lost credibility--I understand. My husband kind of felt that way too. I think it's a male/female thing. I think women are more intuitive about whom they can trust--though we are frequently wrong in the long run!
Hey there! Very hot, fun story! I liked the mirror angle with seeing him/not being able to see him. Clever! And your line about how she would dress in a different style every the day and her friends would never know which she would be made me smile. Very romantic, overall. :)
I will say, though, it is making me very glad I didn't go with my original entry to the contest - because it was eerily similar in premise to this one. I mean, other than the locale was different, *really* similar. Would have felt like we were wearing the same dress to the party! Hehe!
I'll have to check out your other stories. Cheers!
From your title down. I thought this was a stellar effort. Great use of the Halloween theme and making it integral to the story, not just having regular action take place at a costume party or be spooky. Pacing was great - the reveal about Mikey in the middle and her not recognizing him at first was perfect. If your Anon reader had kept going, s/he would have seen the same. Very hot action, very creative and true to life. Great characters and the dialogue really gave them a relationship. Wonderful story all around, one of the best of the Halloween Contest so far.
What a story...wish was mine..Her name was Anne and has been gone for several years..Maybe this Halloween
This is a beautiful story that made me cry a few times... I just wish I had known because crying wasn't my intention when entering this site.
Definitely keep writing but maybe add a bit of a description at the top?
Loved the theme and how she wove it into the story. Tragedy turned into a lost love finally returned. Loved it !
Great story. Cried a few times from own loss. Keep up the writing!
The title threw me but the story was perfection. I smiled throughout and cried. Loved everything about it and wish for so many who've had this type of loss it was true. You have a contest winner!! Good luck!