All Comments on 'Pizza Man Delivers'

It was a good idea for the story, but I got a little lost at times. I think you just need to keep on working at it. Just needs a little cleaning up

Great fantasy and it provided a wonderful visual. The only thing I could think of to make it better would have been if the wife had told the pizza guy to shoot off all over the pizza and when he was done cumming, for her to take a slice that had a large load on it and begin eating it in front of him. That would have really given him something to think about on his way to his next delivery..