All Comments on 'Plain Jane Full of Surprises'

Very well written and as always it sure holds your attention.. Just keep them coming..

The strength of the storyline kept me reading until the end but there were loads of editorial mistakes and the speech of all the characters leaves a lot to be desired. People just don't talk the way you write. You seemed to fluctuate between wanting to tell the story in the middle of letting the characters speak for themselves and sometimes both got muddled up. I would suggest you get yourself an editor who can both spot the grammatical mistakes and help you with dialogue. As a professional journalist, you will have realised the skills you already have are very different from writing stories. (And I recognised "fair dinkum" as Antipodean slang!)

I check new stories on Literotica daily for writings such as yours. I've read Literotica several years and other erotic writings decades before the internet, so it is hard for a story to touch me in more than just one area. Your sex scenes are great but I've read a lot of those over the years. Your characters are well written - interesting and likable. But I've also read a lot of "nicely written" characters over the years. Your scenes are well written, with excellent dialogue. But I've also read a lot of such scenes over the years. But I have very rarely read such an excellent combination of all those factors. You got me in my "soft spot" - which is intelligent women. I'm very lucky to be married for many years to a very intelligent and sensuous woman. I have read several of your stories and will now go back and re-read them. Thanks for a very pleasurable reading experience. If you feel you can and you desire to, I would love a sequel to this story, but I do understand it would be very difficult to follow up on this "as perfect a story as I can imagine" writing.

I liked what I've read so far but it doesn't feel finished will we see the rest soon.

I read and avidly wait for your stories I am not a graduate of English but I consider your stories are five star !!!

I see some pithy remarks above in a critique hence my title

Please think about continuing this story

James

This is a totally enjoyable story. I chuckled excessively at the beginning with the sharp tongued dialog and unencumbered wit and intellect Jane's character was given.

A lot of commonsense approach was deeply appreciated in the midst of many banal presentations.

I look forward to reading your other presentations.

very productive and with different views on the same old subjects. Congratulations. You could be considered for the "oscar" in this category for your whole "oeuvre". Thanks again.

Totally unreadable! One big boring run on sentence!

She's annoying. He's a dick. His Mom's a major league asshole!

NO MORE!!

Speaking of assholes... what are you on Ugh?

You have well supported my faith in your talents. When I see your name as the author it tells me the tale will be well worth reading.

I am always amused by the phantoms. Nine comments only yours and one other has anykind of a name; but that is the way people are these days - don't envolve me.

To bad that a spell checker doesn't catch the you vs yours. A minor problem.

While I enjoyed the story thouroughly and found it to be quite humourous I only gave you a 75 because of the lack of editing. A quick proof read would have improved the story 100%.

I will be looking forward to your next submission with anticipation. Jerry

thats it??? no more??? i feel cheated if theres not going to be more!!!

I thought the first 90 percent of your story was great, but the last ten percent only good. It just seemed a little weak, I was expecting an earth shattering ka boom, after the first great 90 percent. On the other hand, I'm normally full of $@#$ so you can ignore this comment.

Good story line poorly written. Inexcuseable errors in grammar.

Liked it a good read......though i doubt there really are any poeple like that out there....!

Dear Author, Loved this cheeky little piece of writing, 'Simply marvelous darling' Thank you, jntiques/john

Great job. "More, please!"

The beginning was "so...so" then it took off ! Rockets galore ! 5+