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by JaneDoe31
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Anonymousalmost 11 years agoLove the story!
Suggestion: You might consider having your lover over while your husband hides. Make it passionate, quick (with a 30 minute window before you have to go pick up your husband from the gym or something).
Might be hot!?
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoOK story, but kept switching between first person "I" and third person "she" which makes it confusing to read. Pick one and keep it consistent.
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoConfusing points of view
The shifts from 1st to 3rd person POVs was really annoying...
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoIt seems that the author insinuated that only HE had feelings of guilt, while she was the instigator
Of the affair. Rather convenient of him. Make himself look like a bystander than an active and willing participant.
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