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by DuckLover

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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago

Excellent story, however it is written as though you were speaking which becomes troublesome for pacing the sentences.

Also, there were extra adjectives that you used which broke the flow of you sentences.

Hope to see more stories of yours in the future.

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