by XXXman1
What happens the next day or the next date?
Write more stories, this is good
I want to have more
I can say without hesitation that this is easily one of the most erotic mind control stories I have ever read, and believe me, I read a lot of them.
In terms of useful feedback, my main advice would be to write your stories in a text editor with an automatic spellcheck (microsoft word or whatnot); that'll help you get rid of some of the typos you've made here and there.
Other than that, it's absolutely fantastic work, and I sincerely hope you'll keep writing!
MInd control is such a tough topic to tackle. I've considered several stories in that direction and have wimped out. Good job! It was a fun read!