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this story would be better if you were consistent with your words. First you say Avinash is Pooja's boyfriend, then you say they are engaged, and then you say she is married to him. Even though you write that Pooja is engaged and that Mark was told that she is engaged, when she is on the phone with him, she says she is married to Avinash! Which is it, boyfriend, engaged, or married?

I wish I could continue to read thsis story since I like the story idea, but the inconsistency is forcing me to stop reading at the middle of the 1st phone conversation between Pooja and Mark. It is difficult to find interesting or good stories like yours that haveinterracial stories of Indians/desis with Americans or Europeans on Lit, but I cannot continue to read it since this story is making me confused within the first couple of paragraphs. Please correct the mistakes and post it again!

Wow, the sex scene at the end was simply amazing. Well done!

cont in part2.....