All Comments on 'Poolside Pleasures'

You slaughtered the story with atrocious grammar. I got as far as "...to small" and decided I couldn't take it anymore. Learn when to use apostrophes and please let the word processor on your computer guide you through the proper conjugation of a participle. Above all else, ask one of the volunteer editors on this website to help out. Even experienced writers use editors!

grammar or no grammar

Wow, way to put yourself out there random Anonymous user! But thank you for stopping by and leaving your observations. Clearly you're not horny enough for a simple "to small", which doesn't actually appear once in this piece, to derail your train of thought to finish. Grats.

Insightful and hot story. Girls just wanna have fun

Happy to see people enjoyed reading about our RP! Maybe we should plan that part 2?

Made me hard

Very fucking hot! Great start!

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