by Elodiegirlie
This is awesome!!! Never see her written about. I’m sure you could do Neko Case or, for someone younger, Phoebe Bridgers.
Please continue with this story, it is very good. I enjoyed reading it & I hope you will write more chapters to it.
Great story. I loved reading this story. It is another great story of yours. Please continue writing more chapters to this story.
I loved the flow and style, and had no problem with the comma usage. People need to learn to read more than one thought in a sentence, and your story, besides being sensual and fun to read, was fine grammatically. Can't wait for more..
WAAAAY too many commas. A little restraint with the punctuation next time, 'kay?
Darling, I love it! Thanks so much. There'd better be more on the way...