All Comments on 'Possession'

i was kinda disappointed as it neared the climax. the ending seemed as if it was forced and it didn't seem to match with the beginning of the story. all in all it was good to me(because i read the whole thing).

I'm afraid I have to agree with the previous comment. The first four pages were so good that I was completely engrossed in the story--almost couldn't remember what day it was or where MY husband was! But the ending just felt abrupt and forced. Also, it's hard to imagine that a women who suffered such pain and abuse would be ready for energetic sex the very next night, no matter how much she liked the man.

Thanks for commenting! I don't think I realized the ending didn't exactly feel right. Too bad I can't change it now lol. But maybe after the contest is over I'll see about taking it down if I can and fixing the ending, making it longer so it works better.

As for the pain, lol, I thought about mention she'd been taking aspirin all day to help, but then was like, meh. Lesson learned XP

You definitely draw the reader in, especially with your close attention to detail! Poor, real Jared. I hope he finds peace and isn't lingering looking for his beloved wife. I'm glad Gary is in her life. Maybe he can teach Lis psychic protection next and she can join him in being a warrior of Light. Goodluck!

~Luna

You should make this a serises it would be really good like how she and gary become better aquaited and then get married and then he hurts her feelings and then he takes her on a cruise she's been wanting to go to and she gives him a case of blue balls till they get back and then she forgives him and put some shower sex and kitchen sex on the counters and the table and have them go on a date and he wants her then and there so he follows her to the bathroom just giving good ideas to put in the next edit really needs to be a series cause I would read it

I really loved this story it kept my intrest from the 1st page to the 4th i but really didnt like the way it ended it was hard for me to actually full away from the story when it was over i really think you should make it a series. It would really be a good one

It was so worth more than the 5 stars that i gave it. This story broke the fucking scale in my book