by taniarice
So, there's like a maaaajor difference between hot guys that are possessive, and mysoginistic pieces of shit with no respect for women. Your main guy is 100% the latter, and Ivan seemed cool but then totally was an active participant in the kidnapping and sexual violation of a woman. Then you introduce Ivan's wife, and tease the idea that there's gonna be a strong female character in this thing, only to paint her as a harpy shrew who actually doesn't have much power in the relationship, considering the fact that her husband didn't have a problem with hanging up on her. You literally have a line that says 'he didn't have time for his wife. " Like damn, dude, I like some non-con, but not when the male sex character reminds me of my white incel neighbor
For a guy who acts as if he's sexually experienced as Gene Simmons h he's actually about as sensual as a robot! He act like a self entitled college jock who learned all his moves from a manual. This is about as erotic as watching a statistics tutorial.
So he was all happy to rape her until he found out he was raping a virgin? You would think a rapist would be more than pleased to find that out.
I didn't comment on each chapter but I am equally in love with all of them so far. Please, don't keep us waiting too long!
Can't wait for the next chapter .He is without doubt a bastard .Lets hope he redeems himself in the next chapter.
This is one of two stories that I really look forward to seeing always checking to see if a new chapter has been posted
It has burned slowly....but has now burst into flame! Lovely!
Great chapter! Love the characters and I'm thrilled Dimitri is taking care of good old step-dad! I also love the dynamics between Ivan and his wife. While the ending added a nice twist - the story was way too short!
Please hurry with the next chapter!
I absolutely adore this story! Please keep it up! More more more!
So glad you posted another chapter. Keep them coming and make them longer!
I'm really enjoying your story. Good job with the character development. Looking forward to the next chapter.
~LB
Brilliant chapter. Please don't make us wait too long for chapter 7. Every time you tease us with your endings, which then always leaves me wanting more. You're so cruel. ;) PLEASE POST CHAPTER 7 NOW!
I like your story but it's getting old with the same cliche of she doesn't tell him she's a virgin and he automatically thinks she's experienced but finds out the first time they have sex and then he wants her even more and says to hell with it she's mine or he feels guilty and decides not to touch her and trys to make it up to her and eventually they fall in love, conflict happens then its resolved and they can be together, The End.
As others have said, love the character development, the story line, and can't wait for more. But I'm sure we would all appreciate it if you made your chapters longer. Can't wait for your next chapter!!! I cant wait to see where this all goes!!
I was so excited the first time that I sailed through it! This time I took my time itss reallllly good.For some reason it seemed to short but maybe the wait just got me! I hope Kevin gets his ass kicked! Now I didn't know that he had no idea she was a virgin....I thought he knew the whole time. He seemed a little freaked I wonder how that going to play out. I hope we don't have to wait to long for the next one. Oh well I am going to go read "Traitor's Daughter" to pass the time
The character development here is superb.
Beautifully written and a cracker from the first word of Ch 1
Well done indeed.
Everyone played their part perfectly here, good and bad. Your character development is superb.
The down side of a serialized story is that it is easily to loose track of the real time of the story. This is all happening within a short period of time, yet you are not rushing the actions and interactions.
Phil_Patsfan--don't know if you saw my previous note, but condolences...
This is a great story! I'm glad Kevin is getting what he deserves ( I hope it is bad)! I hope Beth will get what she deserves (a happy ending); now that Dimitri has taken her virginity, will he want to let her go? Please keep writing!
too short, too short,,, too short,,, ooh god how long til the next chapter i love this story soooooo much xxxxxx please please dont stop
I love that Beth isn't automatically in love with him, that she still struggles to remain distant and almost indifferent to him. Very well written. Can't wait for next chapter :) - thanks, Tatum
can't wait for the next! I missed you taniarice!
What a cliffhanger! That's so mean! Was so glad you posted, another fantastic chapter as always, I can't wait to see what the fallout is going to be. Can't help but want these two together though and I hope so something horrible happens to Kevin!
Why did you leave us hanging I want to know what's next!!! Please please please don't have us waiting to long!
so glad it came in ! I have been waiting for a few different stories and this one was one of the best