All Comments on 'Prelude to a Sister'

Hey liked the idea, a sound start but just to short, i know its a prelude but you just get into it and its over.

if the next one is longer then your on to a winner, keep it up.

Ok to tease your readers to get their interest, but you should have built your characters more. And if you don't mention again that your sister is only fourteen, Literotica might let you get away with it :)

Not bad. Not bad at all. I like the teaser as I hope that was your angle. But the next installment needs to be a little bit longer. If it's only one page then you're going to need at least 2 or 3 more additional editions! Until next story...later...Jim

needs more sex

I don't care that your sister is fourteen,girls bleed at a lot earlier age. I really don't like to think "I'm" tasting my own semen. Understand you aren't the only one who thinks this is 'cool'. I'm just fedup with the "swap". You need more on the Characters, you get my drift ?

tell u the truth, it wasn't sexy enough but maybe i should read all of the stories first. holla at your boy!!!

another wanna be writer that starts but can't finish his story totally usless