All Comments on 'Pride and Punishment.'

Seemed very stream of consciousness, and that doesn't always work. Also, certain details in the story didn't match up with the same details later on (14 inches became 12, etc.) Also, had a lot of fetishes that went on the too far end of the scale.

You have yet to to get a big red H (hot story) on your submissions so based on that just give up submitting stories here.